Poem

Poem

 

 

in a dimly lit closet

a small box

a smaller pistol

a decision

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/21/22

Reviews

[slfisher89]

A wonderfully compact poem; with a novel's worth of a story

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, sl,
j.

[Kim S.]

wow, this is amazing! very interesting and intriguing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, beckie.
j.

[KWP]

oooh how fablulous this is .. that could be the first page of a choose your own adventure book right there :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, KWP...the adventure might be really short.
j.

[SM Davis]

Whew! Jacob! I did as Ken did… had to see the Poem. I’m not surprised as you’re brilliant in your own rite, but I am not disappointed. That’s a one -two punch.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, SM,
j.

[Corset]

Harmless , small, hidden until a human makes a decision to pick it up. Guns are not dangerous, humans are, to others or to themselves the danger lies within our own minds and the ability to make our own decisions. very powerful imagery J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely true what you say...thank you, Corset.
j.

[Ken Simm.]

When you write something simply called poem, I just have to look. What I didn't expect, (or perhaps I did knowing you) is something so poignant and simply beautiful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Ken,
j.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

Such an intriguing write here Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Kesch,
j.

[Lathen Griffiths]

Rather intriguing Jacob, I like it as it has me guessing.

Lathen

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lathen,
j.

[lightsong]

Lol live or die YES! it's like this for us poets we take it to the extreme. no grey. well considering your "poem" I want to shoot some letters right now maybe my poem decides then to born??

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I really get a kick out of this reply, thank you, lightsong,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Ah but was it loaded
That’s the million dollar question
I’m curious
Great write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

that is a good question, Julie...and really, I don't know.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Ok cheers take care