Rain

Rain

 

 

loopholes

clogged,

a heart on hold

tremors

surgery to repair love damage

 

beats a little slower

but showers don't 

hurt as they used to.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/11/21

Reviews

[Lisasview]

Very interesting metaphor
Showers don't hurt like the use to..
Really enjoyed this..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lisa,
j.

[Writergurl (Mama's Girl..]

showers don't hurt like they used to
I love that line, it's true once you are already numb.
amazing write...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, writergurl,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... I almost had a Stroke when I woke from a Nightmare that I thought was Real. This is the Reason to give your Mind the "knowledge and exposure to heal and repair our Laws that affect our Mental Health and Longevity. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and then maybe the showers are soothing...
thank you, Pat,
j.

[lightsong]

Gosh! yes, I know... I know... some wounds leave scars, and no matter how harsh pain we may face later, it doesn't matter... it doesn't feel as profound as that first time. we are dull and empty, if we are hurt or not it doesn't matter for us anymore. deep, deep pain hidden there. deep unhealed one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, lightsong,
j.

[Perdition]

I recall so many clouds, so many walks outside in the cold rain. This machine-gun delivery of yours grows inside the heart all too familiar, it's an odd amazing period of time that just disappears or the smell of lilac that drops after spring or perhaps the sudden smell from a brown lunch paper bag you've retained since childhood that opens a wound. In other words, you hit the mark, and to find our umbrellas, well, we do get better but, it changes us. Shame on our ability to turn a good solid cutting rain into a drizzle! Thanks, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Perdition,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

A very poignant poem with lovely metaphors, we all have loopholes in our love, and as we age the shower isn’t quite the same.
Happy holidays dear J.
Best
B.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you , Betty, and Happy Holidays back at ya.
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Enjoy J….keep up the great poetry!

[John the Baptist]

I would say it depends on whom you're showering with.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good point, John,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Very nice use of words. Jacob, you left the reader with things to ponder. I agree. The rain is less painful with time and distance. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful reply, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

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I guess after extensive damage to the loving heart and the many surgeries required to make it heal, those beats would be slower and the pain would lessen over time. I doubt a heart is ever truly on hold, though. It's much too stubborn an organ for that. Always waiting for the right person to give some more of itself to. Nice to read your words again, Jacob. ⚘

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, too stubborn...I so agree, Jamila,
thank you,
j.

[Karmee]

I can feel the rain soothe the soul
this is an emotional read
very outstanding

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review,
I saw your profile....yes, big different between being alone and being lonely...
j.

[Karmee]

Yes, you can be alone and be happy.
thank you for checking out my profile