the onomatopoeia of us

the onomatopoeia of us

 

 

 

love is two poems

meeting in the aisle

of the grocery store

 

sharing a cart of keepsakes

and overpriced memories

that didn't seem so at the time

 

conversation rung up at the checkout 

smiles turn similes 

as it feels like yesterday

 

minus one option,

there is no sale

on what we had

 

just a dangling metaphor

of what we are now

two poems exchanging verse.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/12/21

Reviews

[Desert Knave]

Love the very concept that drives this one. Well done. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Jim,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Couplets from the Past … where shopping carts collide with Fruit and Vegetables and a bottle of Vintage Wine… so Divine… Memories in the making by a Fireside. Blessings for Christmas Eve… ❤️

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are just a living poem, Pat....such a tender heart.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

A la Carte … a Sweet. 💜 Heart… Pat

[Chris Shaw]

This is lovely. Proving that past relationships can remain positive long after the breakup. This is so visual and it played out beautifully like a movie. I saw those smiles and shared those memories and I felt affection here. Yes, I felt warmth.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris...I appreciate your kind words..I almost liked this one.
j.