Sheet Music

Sheet Music

singing fathers,

drown out children

with little or no voice

cringing in the corner of the orchestra pit

at the feet of parents

cowering

the drunk actors on stage

dialogue of cursing, spitting

the curtain falls

those small fry

caught in a net of astonishment

"Are we not supposed to be loved?"

Big fish, scaly cats

ripping skin

hearts belched out with a groan

the song is a vomitous rage

Child services is the choir

singing acappela 

pleading stars remorse in the play

booed into prison

a marginal review

they are all fired

the musical scratched

those children find enough voice

to laugh

and laugh...

erin-cilberto

12/10/21

Reviews

[light and ashes]

"a marginal review
they are all fired
the musical scratched
those children find enough voice

to laugh
and laugh..."

and laughing is sometimes enough,
because sometimes laughing is a victory,
even if only a small one.

You are amazing, Jacob. I love your work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are always welcome.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

It's a sad social commentary on the state of mental health in our nation when it isn't just guns and drugs and pedophiles we have to protect the children from but also from those charged with the duty of their protection and growth. A moving write.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fabian,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

A moving poem love the metaphor (pleural) and the tragedy of child abuse and even worse the satanic ritual abuse of children which is coming out now I’m so shocked at

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so much of it...sickening...
thank you for your compassionate words, Julie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Thanks that’s ok 👍 have a merry Xmas 🤶

[Lydia Shutter]

It is brutally sad when parents are abusive to children...or to each other. Children carry the scars throughout their lives even if they do learn to laugh again. Child services can only do so much. Written with such compassion. Wonderful. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Child abuse in my book, is worse than murder...but it is a kind of murder,
thank you for your understanding review, Lydi,
j.

[light and ashes]

Oh, wow, is this ever an emotionally poignant write......
It's nice to know that the children got to have the last laugh.
Those children deserve to laugh.
100

[jacob erin-cilberto]

they certainly do, light.
thank you,
j.

[light and ashes]

You're welcome.

[Patricia]

Such a painful subject and one that NEVER is given enough light. I thank you for shedding some here. People want to sweep these issues under the rug, hide them in closets as to not distress their tiny minds and we should not let them. As writers it is our responsibility, I believe. Excellent writing my friend!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your thoughtful and understanding review, Patricia,
j.

[Patricia]

You’re welcome

[William Michael Reeves]

Such a ton of meaning behind those words. Reminded me of listening to arguments between parents while huddled in the bedroom. Actors acting their act. Captive audience captivated by the captured tragedy. Captured in our memories. And I like the uplifting end. There is a voice of assistance ready to help if the children can just get to it. Or it get to them. This is very poignant.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And they think we don't hear them...
thanks for your words, Bill,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Using the theater as symbolic of abusive homes is very appropriate, for such homes feature ongoing scenes of drama. Sometimes the children of these situations turn out all right, as the poem suggests. On the other hand, sometimes they become serial killers.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, John,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Children have little or no say in what happens to them. There are alot of truly awful parents around. It is a sad situation that some children have to endure such circumstances. As for child services, they don't always get it right and children can suffer even more as a result of their involvement. We have had some horrendous cases over here as a result of lockdowns.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, I can imagine...with the lockdowns.
thank you, Chris,
j.

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[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you.