Poem

Poem

 

 

my emotions live

within a split-level heart

the basement flooded

 

erin-cilberto

11/29/21

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

A flooded basement. I know the feeling Jacob. Seem we cannot win and we can being swimming in s**t. I liked the honest words and thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Fran Marie]

drowned emotions laden with
the heaviest of tears ..i m feeling
the sad vibrations here...

well done

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fran,
j.

[Stella Armour]

That feeling of drowning in sadness, but there is a light above it all that will prevail..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Stella,
j.

[Cherrie]

When we strip a poem down to its essence a senryu emerges- full and raw.
There is a difference in counting syllables to comply with a form , and impacting the reader. Really excellent piece.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Cherrie,
j.

[light and ashes]

Me too.... being a person who feels everything. Some things too intensely.
VERY well said, 100.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding words, light,
j.

[light and ashes]

You are very welcome, jacob.

[Chris Shaw]

Gasping for air. I feel a survivor here of pain struggling against the odds.

Life can be overwhelming at times dear J and those emotions an unwanted roller coaster ride.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

How the tears fill the basement and the air is thin on higher ground.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, very thin...
thank you, andrew,
j.

[lightsong]

...and a truest poem comes when the truest emotions overloading and overflowing and overwhelming from that treasured split, You make me feel both... an open heart, and a wounded heart, and in both the split is real, the emotions are vibrant... and another brilliance from your overwhelmed pen.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Excellent senryu J. One that had me seeing a bit of myself in it to be honest. I tend to find myself spending a lot of time in that flooded basement of mine unfortunately. Great work my friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Carlos,
j.