Life, the Oval track

Life, the Oval track

i am an old man, as such

my life in a final turn

the track has been picturesque

the landscape most interesting

i find solace and wisdom in age

respect knocks on the door

long silver locks

keep some secrets

disclose others

impart stories 

with poetry leaning in final stages

i must politely bow

and take my leave

i am an old man, as such

the checkered flag

near the gates

do wonder if they will open for me

or if i will be dissuaded

and asked to drive on.

erin-cilberto

11/12/21

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

A reflection on life and how we have dealt with it as we near the finishing line. Good to reflect, good to learn by our mistakes, but no good worrying about them. As to those pearly gates, well I am in no hurry to find out whether they will open or close for me :) There is acceptance here for the inevitable.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Me either sis...no hurry...
thank you!
bro j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

'The track has been picturesque' An excellently written poem! I apologize it took me so long to review this since I was last on here, but I'm glad this was the one I clicked! This is a very thought-provoking piece full of emotion. In a way, it's almost macabre but written in a haunting and thankful way, saying goodbye but being okay with it. Thank you for sharing. (:

[jacob erin-cilberto]

No need to ever apologize....Life does happen, and we have to deal with it. I appreciate your kind review, Colacat,
j.

[keith]

a well written verse but no need to worry ... ain't s**t you can do about it pal! there is no fountain of youth!
full circle some say with many surrendering to the expected norms
FUK THAT!
march forward even at the lower speed
speak out for silence is not golden
i cannot find many wrongs or rights with aging
i am old i am tired and poor
my feet stink and i still don't love jesus (thanks to jimmy)
my days are what they are ... all in all i am the happiest i have ever been ... period!
and i can nap when i want or eat ice cream for breakfast!
it has taken my entire life to get to this point ... i have only begun to fight!
go piss in the ocean because you can!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, it has taken my entire life also to get to this rather peaceful point.
I like your reference to marching forward even at lower speed.
thank you for your words, ABG,
j.

[lightsong]

when things slip from our fingers we clink and appreciate them more, seeing with new eyes, similar to a near death experience, no one back from there the same. your last verse had me smiling, best to end it with a touch of humor, my father died with a smile on his face and I still remember the smile (what a coincidence, he died this day back on 2008). may You live long, healthy, happy and creative dear Mr. J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for that share, lightsong.
I appreciate your review...lost my dad in 2017...he was approaching 98.
j.

[lightsong]

mine wasn't old, he was still a man who had many things to give, he was only around 52, well if You knew my mother You wouldn't be so surprised that he died due brain attack, may your dad keep resting in peace, I know how much he meant to You🌷

[Lorry]

Ach, you'll be told there's been some kind of clerical error and you have to do another lap Jacob.
I'll be the boom in the distance you hear as they erect a tent at the side of the track and put me to "sleep." 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh damn, those clerical errors.
thanks for the smile, Lorry,
j.