Double Beds and Free HBO

Double Beds and Free HBO

i left my heart on

for her

she stayed cheap

and only for two nights

checked out on me

early the third morning

the maid found innuendos

lies

and empty pizza boxes

in the clutter

i was charged for the damage

and my key card absconded

now the entry

is forever locked

and i am in the parking lot

watching warily

for cars

and sly smiles

that sluice into my vein

where i once left my heart on

for her.

erin-cilberto

7/4/2021

Reviews

[Cassie]

so sorrrry....you are so good with imagery Jacob and this poem has some sadness and a sense of humour. Get out of the parking lot now and go find some other place

[jacob erin-cilberto]

humor helps us survive...we just have to find a place to stay overnight with all the travel on the page.
thank you, Cassie,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

That's why we have big hearts so we can lose some along our quest. a terrific write with the imagery.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, andrew,
j.

[Fran Marie]

I like the ending
"where I once left my heart on for her"

oh those cheap motels
They leave much to be desired
in more ways than one.
and the messes left behind
tell the story so vividly

Nice work Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fran,
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

Intetesting poem, I enjoyed it a lot.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, JungLee,
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

You are welcome.

[John the Baptist]

If you do a continual Motel 6, you're likely to rent to a few absconders now and then.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Love that word, "absconders"----
thank you, John,
j.

[Relic]

This kind of sparks an image of city exec crossing the borough and finding paid love wherever he can get it but he's not doing too well. ha

Always and intersting poem from you, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Relic,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

"I left my Heart in San Francisco... high on a Hill...
where little Cable Cars climb halfway to the Stars"...
I prefer the view outdoors when Chances are more secure.
"Leaving your Heart On" is a perfect Title for a Country Song.
tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

if only I were more country...well, I am getting there.
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Cheap hotels with hearts being left behind when one sneaks out on you. Sounds like a night that many of us have experienced. The younger years can be cruel on the heart and our minds don’t think properly.

Shameful that there was no pizza left for you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

not even one little slice...plain cheese would have sufficed.
thank you, PB,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

And that is a terrible tragedy that you didn’t even get in me slice 😔

[Chris Shaw]

A cheap hotel and free wi fi. Dear Jacob, it seems she enjoyed the pizza before she cruelly checked out on you on the third morning leaving your heart in the doldrums. You can rest assured you won't have been the only one to experience this. Cheap hotels probably see this all too often. The sly smiles a give away.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she smiled as she left the empty box on the bed...
oh well,
thank you, Chris...I'll have to upgrade.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

She probably would have done the same in a five star. Upgrade of company needed :)

[Marina]

Well, at the minimum, at least you had access to free HBO. It may not be a substitute for the heartbreak, but given I myself was once considering staying in a 5 star Hilton only to discover that the wifi (in this day and age!) was being charged as an extra, at a premium rate, for each day of stay.....that free HBO sounds mighty enticing! Maybe some pizza and a binge watch of The Sopranos will heal the pain. Nice to read you again, Jacob. Well conceived as always. 💛

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Marina...
I have gone broke renting those pay-per-views...maybe I should have stuck with the free HBO...thank you for your insightful words, Marina,
j.