a very short poem

a very short poem

 

 

the river

               swirled

 

without logic.

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/22/2021

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

Illogical!
But there is magical movement here.

I like the brief statement.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ted,
j.

[Miss Sharon]

Short and sweet Jacob! ~Sharon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, and for reviving this one, Sharon.
Hope you are well...
j.

[Lorry]

And like life, it can sometimes look like the gentlest beat, as the chaos reigns under the surface.
Hmm! I wonder why that itches my head at its similarity to this thing we do called life.
That moment where we look round for a grown up and see nothing but frightened old kids looking back. Still, I think I got away with it again as no one seemed to be paying attention to anything other than their own panic 😊

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Lorry...this is such a significant response
and yes, the chaos is only a bit under the surface...
waiting to rise.
j.

[Fairy Khan]

Small, sure, but the thoughts it provokes are big. Life takes all these turns against all logic, all sense, and yet makes sense later somehow.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the most sense made when nothing does...
I agree, Fairy....and thank you for the read and your words,
j.

[sharonlee]

Thought provoking little poem Jacob...

A river has a logic all of its own... which could be said for most things, how ever illogical that might be.

Sharonlee

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and who's to say what is logical anymore...
thank you, Sharonlee..
good luck tomorrow.
j.

[sharonlee]

Thank you.

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes, this is our Country... ‘Tis of Thee... our Land of Liberty...
Amen... tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

true, true.
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

blue, blue.
you are welcome.
Somehow our Country is a Game
of Jeopardy.... with a new "Host"
when the former is the "Past".

[John the Baptist]

The river must be a metaphor for life, which at times does swirl without logic. Both philosophers and poets write about this phenomenon, but neither can fully grasp it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, we cannot grasp, maybe we hope writing about it will get us closer.
j.

[Relic]

..............People do too. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, insightful you, Relic.
thanks.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful write
I agree there is no logic in waters moving esp fast

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie...
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

It’s ok
A pleasure always

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

profoundly true my friend. Great submission.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Carlos...
j.