sometimes writing in the night

sometimes writing in the night

 

 

sentiment rising

from unused, dust covered

implosion of feelings

stored in attic boxes

unlabeled

forgettable 

 

innocuous incentive

insipid love laments

 

there was a time of 

fairy tale belief

 

but that was put aside

to use later

 

I think some of the boxes leaked

heartache, like a poison liquid

seeped in, now out

 

I close the attic door

at a later time

 

will clean out the mess

I let my receptivity 

 

become.

 

 

erin-cilberto

5/18/2021

Reviews

[Ayesha]

It is sometimes gratifying to look at the old mess stored in attic boxes except that now technology has them cached in some inaccessible bit of a code in our digital devices. No incentives. No leaks.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Exactly....thank you, Ayesha...

j.

[Chris Shaw]

What a contrast here Jacob between the time for fairy tale belief and the boxes that leaked heartache. Love just didn't live up to expectations. I like the way you used the word mess, that really sums up the heartache of emotions.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am a mess, but thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[Carola]

jacob, all i can say is wow! an emotional perspective looking backwards.
i particularly love the line - "I think some of the boxes leaked heartache,..."
cheerio carola

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Carola,
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Cleaning out the attic takes time whether figuratively or literally. We are not always prepared mentally and emotionally to let go of those reminders of someone we love.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I think more time figuratively...
Thank you for your insightful response, PB.

Just thanks for reading me.
j.

[John the Baptist]

Memories, good and bad, remain stored in the attic of our minds. Some of these memories can be embarrassing now, but they reflect only the gathering of experience. Some can be painful, but these must remain stored until we can look upon them with both objectivity and compassion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, John,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Just beautiful
I love this one Jacob !!
Take care

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

Not kind just honest
Beautiful write ✍️ thanks Jacob

[NotUsinganymore]

Very interesting poem about holding onto one's memories. I am always a hoarder with the things my friends and family give me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I am the same JungLee,
thank you,
j.

[Carlos Lorenzo Estrada]

Very good submission, Jacob. The first line spoke to me because I often find comfort writing down tales and thoughts at night. Reading further I was reminded of a dresser drawer that held a few love letter from past loves. Reading them often brings sad smiles. Continued success in your writing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Carlos...
I still have a tin that has old letters from loved ones...I will never get rid of them...
j.

[Relic]

Those old memories can get to us when we look back at old flames. Letters once so heartfelt dry up for a time. But somewhere in the back of the mind the same feelings can come back when we least expect it. One side of the mind says, forget it, keep your distance. The other side feels something lost long ago. Hope I explained that good enough.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your insightful review.
j.