thanks to Emmajoy, whose poetry reminds me to get my butt in gear, and write
something that paints pictures in words. I think I had forgotten how to do that.
Memories remain after the passing of time, though colours fade. Often at dawn that's when my heart is more receptive to loss. The imagery is exquisite. The first two couplets stunning and the emotional hit, yes I felt it. Em has influenced you :)
Chris
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Yes, she has...maybe I will start writing some decent description.
thank you, Chris
j.
Funny don't you think, that memories fade from glorious technicolor to shades of grey ... and yet they remain. Tears come suddenly and for no apparent reason ... or at least one that we don't immediately grasp the meaning of ... a picture or a phrase ... maybe a gentle chuckle will open the flood gates and those drops of salt fall freely.
Maybe we get more sentimental as we age.
A good write my friend.
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
yes, a gentle chuckle---
thank you for your words, Ted,
j.
dearest Jacob... your poem is a perfect Eulogy for my husband’s sister Priscilla who just passed ... to the Glory of the Sky on May 17...2021...
with family gathered around. Pris was a Novel in the making... an Artist 👨🎨 with a touch of the hereafter. She now has her Rain and the Clouds gather her tears for the Hollyhocks and Gladiolus of this Earth. She is experiencing a new Birth and our breathing is mellow music 🎶 in the Wake of Ocean waves. Prayerfully, Pat
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Yes, Death really is a new birth, isn't it?
thank you for your words, Pat,
j.
I absolutely adore the imagery in this one. It's so, so hauntingly gorgeous. It's a tad emotional too and will definitely remind the reader of some memory in their life. 'Dawn summons the teardrops', is truly such a beautiful line. This poem reminds me of a sad and almost sick feeling dawn, just an absolute chill in the air.
This is one I'll love to reread again and again.
The "She no longer feels in colour automatically made me think of a love that has passed Jacob, but the damaged oak made me think of the strength you got from her strength is running ever lower for both.
This certainly paints pictures, of of who they and we were and what we became.
The scene being watched of stormy weather carrying on regardless is one of the harshest and coldest of realities to be caught in as your world falls apart. The world keeps spinning, leaving us where?
This one will reverberate into my today for sure.
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
Thank you, Lorry...reading emmajoy is leading me to the conclusion that I write "dull"---
her.. read moreThank you, Lorry...reading emmajoy is leading me to the conclusion that I write "dull"---
her work is pushing me to improve...or try to.
thank you for your kind review,
j.
Oh my....so very emotional. This makes me think of my mom. I watched her wither for months. It was hard to believe she was so strong for so long. I miss her a lot....as I know you miss your mom. Beautifully written. Lydi**
Posted 3 Years Ago
3 Years Ago
thank you for identifying with this piece, Lydi.
I am sorry for your loss as well, but when s.. read morethank you for identifying with this piece, Lydi.
I am sorry for your loss as well, but when someone can read us and relate to the words it is a blessing.
j.
Originally from Bronx, NY, I live in Carbondale, Illinois...teach English at a community college and have been writing and publishing poetry since 1970. I am here to read for inspiration from other po.. more..