Surgical Keys

Surgical Keys

the real and

the surreal

banter boxing

knockout punching

aliases

ailing writer

in contagious state

of debriefing

denuding

prosperous spontaneity

ruptures the recipient

who exits premises

in dark despair

mundane voices

echo in deranged drips

a lyrical leak 

a tainted lullaby

a sordid, sad goodbye

an expendable subject

to harsh verbs

the sentence a plethora

of painfully palpable

protrusion

the synchronized sutures

operate at once

we've lost another

on the table

of disrespect.

erin-cilberto

5/9/2021 

Reviews

[Lorry]

I'll take ten cases of harsh verb grenades, but hold the surreal Jacob. I mean, even for me, who enjoys the occasional day trip to the surreal seaside, this place is starting to look a bit too much like Munch's scream!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

A very interesting painting that is.
unfortunately you are right, the similarities are stark.
and your verb grenades are on their way...
thank you, Lorry.

[Relic]

I'm thinking this may have to do with one we've lost lately. Excellent poem, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Relic,
j.

[John the Baptist]

The medical symbolism represents the outcome of searing words here. Somehow "banter boxing" got out of hand, and the recipient, a lady, I presume, exited in despair. Those harsh verbs will do it every time. The last lines announce the verdict. Back to square one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, John,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

This for me reflects how words have a cutting edge and some wounds are fatal driving poets away like on WC by undesirables.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your read and comment, andrew,
j.