Surgical Keys

Surgical Keys

the real and

the surreal

banter boxing

knockout punching

aliases

ailing writer

in contagious state

of debriefing

denuding

prosperous spontaneity

ruptures the recipient

who exits premises

in dark despair

mundane voices

echo in deranged drips

a lyrical leak 

a tainted lullaby

a sordid, sad goodbye

an expendable subject

to harsh verbs

the sentence a plethora

of painfully palpable

protrusion

the synchronized sutures

operate at once

we've lost another

on the table

of disrespect.

erin-cilberto

5/9/2021 

Reviews

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"we've lost another
on the table
of disrespect."
I am so sad for this victim, and any other victims here. Jacob, your poem cuts the culpable pseudo-surgeons with surgical, alliterative and metaphoric precision. Sadder when the end is brought about by "friends", or instead, detestable, disgraceful trolls disguised as humans. Thank you for this perfect, poetic, post-op analysis. Better than "CSI WC"!..To all involved I can only say- Be Kind. Be Compassionate. Practice Caritas here and everywhere, because you will need it yourself someday.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, I wish all would listen to you, my friend.
Thank you for your words,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked the hardness and the direction of the words Jacob.
"the sentence a plethora
of painfully palpable
protrusion
the synchronized sutures
operate at once"
The above lines stood out to me. The use of the language. Amazing. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Jacob I’ve read this several times
My fav verse is the last one but as I write this I read it again and realise I love it all
I love your poetry
Always have since the first read here

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your read and kind words, Julie.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

You keep us on our toes
With words I know nothing of
Take care
Look forward to more !

[light and ashes]

Such a way with words..........

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, light,
j.

[light and ashes]

:) you're welcome, jacob.

[Ted Kniffen]

There seems to be an amazing amount of alliteration popping up here j. This I think will take more than one read to glean the meaning I will gladly search for. Thanks for giving me something useful to do in the surreal times.

Take care

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for taking the time to search.
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Intense write. Graphic. Poetic. Very well penned. Deep. A lot to delve in here. Tyfs

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cyprian,
j.

[Neville]

what's a metafor mate, it's summat to read into my friend .. and how I do love to delve into thee .. tis surprising what one may find below the surface and just beyond the eye ...

tis true jacob .. I so look forward to my little explorations ...

Until the next time,

All the very best of all good things ................ N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville....I always got a kick out of Adrienne Rich describing Dickinson's use of metaphor....and she pronounced it Metafer...
j.

[Neville]

............................. that's fer enough :)

[Chris Shaw]

Surgical, precision extraction. Sharp, but in this particular case painful and messy. There's alot of bleeding. The wound is deep. Excellent poem J.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Chris.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

Abstract and surreal aren’t always pleasant and be so obscure they paint scary scenes

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, sometimes they do. Thank you for the read and your comment, my friend.
j.

[Poetic Beauty]

You are welcome. This was the thought that came to mind