Please Don't Read this

Please Don't Read this

 

 

I'd like to write a decent poem

but I have caught the need to rhyme

 

no medicine can undo the ragged verse

I've developed the curse

 

the end words have to match

content destroyed with dispatch

 

rhyme me a reason to keep on scribing

too much form I've been imbibing

 

this group of couplets demanding

I stick a clean landing

 

To score a ten on the poetic scale

save me please, I have gone off the rail

 

I'd like to write a decent poem

substance abuse deems the need to atone.

 

I'd like to write a decent poem

I'd like to write a decent poem

 

I'd like to write a decent poem

I'd like to write a decent poem

 

the end.

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/31/2021

Reviews

[Chris Shaw]

I've read it and have to say I am amused that your muse is making you rhyme. This has happened several times lately. I think she is having fun and playing with you. You are not a natural rhymer though I have to say I am enjoying the diversity :)

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris...yes, not natural for me.
glad you found it amusing.
j.

[Dave]

BUT - you did!
Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dave,
j.

[Dave]

You're more than welcome.

[Haley]

This is the reason I don't write poetry. I get into my head about how it should look and sound and I drive myself crazy. With that being said, the rhyme is great and had me laughing out loud! I love it. Thank you! :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Haley,
j.

[AYVID N]

save me please, I have gone off the rail

....Hahaha...I wish I could, my friend...but I sank long ago. Every poem of mine is corrupted by rhyme...an affliction I gave up fighting long ago ... I resign evrytime and just give in to its whims...

I am thrilled about reading your rhyming though...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, DIVYA....
not my strong suit...but appreciate your kind words,
j.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

I am reading this and I am rolling on floor, dear Jacob!
You can be sooo funny!
I love all your poems and I am super-excited about your rhyming! It will be such fun!
Looking forward to all your poems rhyming and non-rhyming!
You're an awesome poet and friend! :)))))))))))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review...and I am happy my lame rhyme attempts can give you a smile.
j.

[John the Baptist]

The need to rhyme
Is not a crime.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Okay, then I should get off with a warning...thank you, John.
j.

[Helen]

The need to rhyme
is not a crime
It's a valid contribution
that should be written in constitution

[Dave Brown]

I know I am well out of date but to me, poems are meant to rhyme and I enjoy the challenge.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And you are very good at it, Dave.
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

And I'm just trying to keep the conversation lively.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

me too jacob .. always ... have to be honest son ... the "ing"s are cheating when rhyming .. so there goes couplets 4 & 5 ... sorry sir .. "poem" and "rhyme" are not a match so couplet 1 goes down the drain ... and you repeat the indecency in couplet #7 ..no rhyming there! ... so your rhythm throughout is abhorrent ...but, that leaves "verse"/ "curse" ... "match" /"dispatch" mmmmmmmmmm that's pretty iffy too .. scratch that one .. so we have... verse, curse, scale, rail ... hmmmmm i love your closing .. poem poem poem poem............ and that title is killer ;)))))))))) over all i must give it a 10/10
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

See I told you I was bad and warned you not to read...
ha ha....and poem and rhyme are near rhyme, just like i am a near poet.
I love the word "abhorrent" even if it's used against me....
thanks for the chuckle and that does rhyme with buckle
I am sitting on my knuckle
so I can't write no more frightening slight to the genre....
my free verse could even be worse.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahahaha yesterday i wore my belt with buckle .. can cause a welt or chuckle ...never give up the ship brother!

[andrew mitchell]

I like to think it’s the creativity that makes a write whether it’s decent or not. Of course the purists will be upset if one breaks the rules but it’s still creativity, an art in itself. The day you can’t write a decent poem will only be a lapse in concentration J maybe a love interest will create this. ;)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you andrew, yes, the purists might hate the rule breakers...then they did not like Emily D. for sure.
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Sorry I went against you wishes and reddit. LOL
Your humor is what makes this great poem eveb better.
As writers we open ourselves to criticism. That is what makes us unique.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

very open, yes.

thank you, Cowboy!

j.