living in a cliché

living in a cliché

 

 

at this point,

i need windshield wipers

on my eyes

 

can't see through the tears

my glass heart

is a retina wretched

in what it sees

 

at this point

my pen stabs

the part of my vision

 

that can't write itself

the part that bleeds blue

 

into partial profanity

the words have dangerous audio

 

i need to pull over

and wait until the howling wind

recedes

 

and it's safe

to hope again.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/9/2021

Reviews

[barleygirl]

You have powerfully expressed why I live alone in the wilderness. My disappointment with all that's "out there" (in civilization) is palpable in your words. Love the windshield wiper analogy (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Margie.
j.

[Vicki T.]

I find myself drawn over and over again to the power of your poetry. Thank you for sharing this poem. Beautiful!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Vicki,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Yes, dear Poet... it is the Peace that surpasses understanding... that keeps us inspired. tenderly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Maybe the cliche in this is we see what we want to see. A cliche can give hope for some cliches have an optimistic view on life.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, some do have an optimistic view...so hey, so what if they are cliches...nothing wrong with that, eh?
thanks, andrew.
j.

[John the Baptist]

If you're speaking of what I think you are, it may be safe to hope again on January 20th.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, John...wasn't consciously Thinking in those terms...but that does certainly fit here...maybe subconsciously ...I was.
thank you,
j.

[TL Boehm]

Until the howling wind recedes- that line stood out for me.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for the visit and your words, Tammy...
and so good to see you...
j.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

I really like the title, it caught my eye.
"my pen stabs
the part of my vision

that can't write itself
the part that bleeds blue", The first part made me think, the second part cleared it up. nice write

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Cyprian,
j.

[Laura Kate]

A disconnect between the known, or the felt, and the said. How sensible and wise it is to pull over and wait for the storm to pass, before attempting to express what I understand to be something of a blindspot; one of the eye, but not of the mind's eye.
I feel the frustration.
Laura.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your review is better than the poem...thank you, Laura....maybe I will pull over for a bit.
j.

[poetgurl]

deepness in this write is quite emotional, You protrayed this write really well.
I can feel your words weep against your soul. Nicely expressed

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Camie...
j.

[Lorry]

And like a sports commentator without a microphone, we fall into such gems as "at the end of the day, it is what it is and we move on."
It's all 6 of one thing and half a dozen of the other if you ask me, which you didn't. I should go, I've said too much...
(exits in a puff of smoke as eerie music plays out.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for the smile, Lorry....really enjoyed your review...as we said in the sixties..."it's super fab gear!"