Dawn Poem

Dawn Poem

 

 

I drew the shades

to more darkness

 

the moon the only light of day

the sun hearts faded 

 

in blue terms

there is no sky

 

just a query as to why

the day is long gone

 

and we will never return.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/25/2020

Reviews

[Patricia]

That is exactly how I feel at the end of the day. It makes me ask did I live today? If I didn’t I pray tomorrow will come and I will do it better. It’s not easy during these times but I try. Wonderful poem j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating, Pat...
j.

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of something hopeful that didn't work out. "And we will never return" has the sound of finality.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John, yes, maybe too much finality...
j.

[.]

Sometimes it seems the day is long gone but it will return anytime, so the setting sun created the moon aura in the mean time to soak with some another kind of glow. And I think both is needed to harmonize everything...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I agree, Dreamer...both need to harmonize....and set the mood for all of us to harmonize.
thank you,
j.

[Neville]

...... sometimes, you just got to let it happen ... because its gonna happen anyway .. and there is a whole lot more sh.. around where this lot came from yet ..... keep ya head low and bide the time, summat's got to give soon............ surely..

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it has to give soon.
thank you for your words, Neville,
j.

[Annette Pisano-Higley]

"the moon the only light of day
the sun hearts faded"
Beautiful and melancholy soliloquy J... blue gone and just a promise of day somewhere, sometime. We are but dust in the wind. You well-describe the dark days. I know those days. Praying for you and all of us. God bless.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Annette,
j.

[light and ashes]

Very well written....this is a perfect example of how black depression can make you feel. I've suffered my whole life with depression off and on. I do believe that there is always a way out..a brighter day on the horizon.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, always a way out...we just have to find that way.
j.

[poetgurl]

aww but will a long day gone bring hopes of a better tomorrow.
nicely presented

[jacob erin-cilberto]

let's hope it will. Thank you, Ang.
j.

[light and ashes]

It does, and it will. Hang in there.

[barleygirl]

Your exquisite & mystical poem brings to mind how some start every day by plugging into the clamor of grievance -- the equivalent of waking to darkness & more darkness -- throwing away whole days before they've had a chance to begin. Some people dwell in the darkness before dawn (damn! I might need to write a poem but I haven't even had my first cup of coffee yet!) . . . happy new year! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding review,
j.