the Candor of lost Ardor

the Candor of lost Ardor

love anticipates

expects

rejects

love soothes

sores

opens doors

then slams them shut

broken hearts abut

building walls strongly absurd

Whispers of rapture

no longer heard.

erin-cilberto

12/25/2020

Reviews

[Helen]

I love the tone of this poem - even though it is about something that could be considered sad, there is an exciting dynamic feel to the poem. The tone and feel of the poem spoke to me more strongly than the subject matter, but the words are clever too - describing something that most people would identify with. I was attracted to the poem by the title. Candor isn't a word we use much in the UK, but it's a useful word and powerful in the context of your title.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Helen.
j.

[.]

Love is not two dimensional and that is the problem with it... But it's indeed an enticing journey.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, indeed it is a journey, Sima.
But so much better when our partner takes it with us....read moreYes, indeed it is a journey, Sima.
But so much better when our partner takes it with us....
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Gentle, hard and direct words and thoughts Jacob. The poetry, like midnight thoughts we share alone. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry my friend.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[andrew mitchell]

The avenues of love has many roads where some have intersections.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Dampened ardor is depressing, lost ardor is pure pain. The spare wording gets that across quite sharply. Ah, the joys of romantic love!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

ah yes, the joys.
Thank you for your kind review, John.
j.

[barleygirl]

Your title is so well-crafted, it out-shines your poem a teensy bit! But your poem is surely emphatic about lost ardor & your candor couldn't be grander! Merry Christmas! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Margie...

Merry Christmas.

[Patricia Wedel]

Love is like Candy Kisses... they melt and become memories with smudges on your Cheeks
... while denying that your hand was in the Cookie Jar. Laughter is medicine when a little bitter tear let me down and Spoiled my Act as a Clown...
I was doing alright... and a little bitter tear let me down. Burl Ives would love this version. Merry Christmas 🎄 Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I like your reference to Burl...
Yes laughter can sometimes overcome those tears.
thank you, Pat,
j.