Conversation

Conversation

 

 

 

paradoxical complaints

i whine and dine you to death

you reach out from the grave

with your dagger eyes

protrusions of cold steel

 

and i am dragged six-feet under

with the supposition

that you will love me until my bones

turn to your dust

and the dark soil becomes my 

permanent residence

 

that blade that is your smile

digs through my flannel disposition

to the heart

that lies on your plate

until the waiter sets dessert

upon our headstones.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/8/2020

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

nothing like loving a dark and powerful woman .. the more she doesn't give a rip .. "rip" ... get it? RIP :)))))))))))))))))))))))) something desirable about that cold blade ... a certain deserved frozen slaying .. almost self administered ... i think of Poe's darkness and Sylvia Plath's life ... for me its those dagger eyes, cold steel and blade of a smile thrust through my flannel PJ s that makes this a desirable relief from pain ... and I am an optimist at heart .. I like her ;[
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, E.
I will give a RIP one of these days.
And I am flattered that in your review, you mention two of my favorites...I did my Masters thesis on Plath and Anne Sexton....that was a dark but really interesting undertaking.

[Einstein Noodle]

i bet it was ... such dark pain makes for intense and sadly wondrous lives some times .. others a tragic waste .. funny how art can make such a difference ... peace brother :)

[Cherrie Palmer]

Now that's a bad date. I think you should lose her number, and whatever you do don't give her any eye contact. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

pretty sound advice...thank you, Cherrie,
j.

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Our self unuttered conversation with someone whom we want to speak when we complain. There were lot of arguing over an issue that took us to the gravity of grave but a sweet interference ultimately breaks this silent conversation.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely Dreamer, Absolutely.
thank you,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This is so dark Jacob and that blade which is her smile cut sharply with its flash of cold steel. Sent a shiver through me it did. Excellent write.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris...
appreciate you.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Wow, this one is dark....will the one who got away think of you always....even in death? Will that person still be able to darken your thoughts even when gone? I love the line, "until the waiter sets dessert upon our headstones!" Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi.
j.

[Stella Armour]

Love this Jacob, so many ways to read it depending on your past relationships.
The big ( especially male) ego that thinks they have owned you and you will remain under their control even after death.... it does make me smile, "i whine and dine you to death" .... haha brilliant !

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Stella,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

You leave me quiet like a smile that I remember...
covered with Roses and bleeding hearts. gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Pat,
j.