as One

as One

 

fraudulent distance

my heart weeps

with an abundance 

of empathy

 

flowers anoint 

the proposed inception

tears annoy the cheeks

of stone longing

 

my blond wisdom,

you know me better than i

your gentle spirit

finds my eyes misting

 

as I pluck

the sorrow

from your breast

and lay it to rest.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/8/2020

Reviews

[Fairy Khan]

"as I pluck
the sorrow
from your breast
and lay it to rest."
So often, when someone we truly care for is in pain, we so want this to happen. Amazing poetry, as usual.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fairy...you understand.
j.

[Neville]

emotionally charged to the point of overflowing with the stuff lovers yearn for and miss so bad when gone ..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Neville,
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Touching and sentimental, perhaps a bit sad and introspective. This poem gives the feeling of someone reaching out to another in need. Is it hardened by the resolve of what cannot be? There's so much trepidation in the world as of late. As for myself, apart from wearing a mask to do my shopping and wiping down my groceries...not much of my life has changed. It's no great inconvenience to me...just a thing to be endured until it passes. And I'm as patient as an oyster. I'm too old to rush and too experienced to become desperate. I believe, as Thoreau, that it is not a characteristic of wisdom to do desperate things.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

You have such incredible insight, Fabian...
thank you,
j.

[Fran Marie]

m y blond wisdom,
you know me better than i
your gentle spirit
finds my eyes misting

such deep emotions spill
forth within these lines
the entire poem s o nicely
expressed;;

Happy Thankgiving Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fran, and Happy Thanksgiving back at you.
j.

[Patricia]

Wow j. This is truly your heart and I felt it in this piece, lovely!!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Pat,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Absolutely beautiful.There is much love in these words.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Hello Jacob. Honest, deep and powerful words shared.
"my blond wisdom,
you know me better than i
your gentle spirit
finds my eyes misting"
I loved the above lines. I wanted to know more and thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I enjoy this one and you are welcome Jacob.

[Sami Khalil]

Sadness permeates this write with intense emotions. We must find empathy to embrace others and wish them the best in their struggles. You impress on us the bluish, sad reality sir Jacob...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind and understanding review, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sir. Happy Thanksgiving...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This feels so love inspired as the protagonist rues that they and their love interest are not together. But it seems she reveres him and he wishes so much to be there to ease her sorrows. As always packed with intrigue and emotion Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John,
j.