Girls

Girls

 

 

forever legs

 

----and nuptial napes

 

auburn drapes

 

                               across garrulous, green eyes

dark caverns

inviting

 

perilous

 

forever ransomed

 

                     I continue to pay

                                                      as I go.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/1/2020

Reviews

[Lorry]

From the playground onwatds, we find these strange creatures so alluring, wondering what on earth they are doing, playing hopscotch in boxes of secret symbols and meanings, with no winner or losers that these eyes ever fathomed, yet the older we get, that allure never diminishes, nor the puzzlement.
One day maybe, they may let us in on the secret, but I wouldn't bank on it.
And yes, I am in no doubt that this comment will be forgotten by me around noon, and somewhere down the line I will be reminded of it and made to pay....And not just in the hours, days, years spent trying to figure out that never ending allure. 😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, they make us forget our sense...thank you, Lorry,
j.

[emmajoy]

This could almost be a weather report, dear j. - whether or not to be captivated by true green eyes or their meaning, and of course, the smile beneath them This is a strangely alluring piece of come hithering, sir!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, em. You made me smile.
j.

[emmajoy]

And always free, sir! Smiles are good for the laughter lines..



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[Cherrie]

Awe, the Achilles such a tender spot.:)

[Cherrie]

Next poem Cat Nip for the soul

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Cherrie...and I really like your new pic.
j.

[Cherrie]

Lol thank you:) I broke out my go to 70's hair.

[Betty Hermelee]

this seems like a sex traffic ring with young girls and men who keep coming back. I love your stark images and the last line..."I continue to pay, as I go"....Wonderful Brevity poem Jacob..... your subject matter sometimes kinky but always unique....love it!!!
xo, Betty

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Betty, and yes i could see the sex traffic ring thing...
Although I was thinking in a different direction...:))))

[Betty Hermelee]

Uh oh I missed it again!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is never a miss, Betty, you saw how the poem spoke to you...and that was a legitimate interpretation...
the poem does fit that one as well.

[Rose]

Forever ransomed? Haha, absolutely. This is awesome and amazing as always ❤️

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Rose,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Has the sound of one who has seen more than one relationship go sour. Really liked the image "garrulous, green eyes." Not sure what garrulous means here, but green eyes certainly means jealousy. Perhaps that's the source of the problem. Napes, drapes; garrulous, perilous. I think you are a latent rhymer, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

"a latent rhymer"---perhaps...thank you, John,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

I could write a poem, "forever ransomed"...
would you think me a thief as though it were a "hope diamond"?
Whoa... an Irish blessing just before Election. Be still my heart.
"Begin the Beguine"... your poem.. so seductively charming. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind words, Pat,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Ah those green eyes so mesmerise us and we are sucked in but all too often pay for such weak moments. This is one of you very best Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, John,
j.

[duff]

Oh ya my friend. Smart and seductive. It is seedy and I love it. Dark and clever walking. Nicely done Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your words, duff,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

This is so clever, so you continue look and to pay emotionally as you go. So you like auburn hair, green eyes and long legs. That colouring seems very Irish to me. Perilous , yes.:))

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.