Metamorphosis

Metamorphosis  

 

 

 

peaceful

in her garden,

she grows comfort

 

i pick greens 

of her kindness

her demeanor blossoms

 

in fall,

in winter

she stands tall

 

emitting a certain warmth

that ripens

with an early October breeze

 

i love the fruits

of her intensity

no storm can eradicate

 

she is beauty

she is a dozen roses

in one

 

opening to the song of the wind

i am a cloud

moved to a standstill

 

as i rain within her

smile

and become a clear sky.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/24/2020

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Simply beautiful, marvelously tasteful, lovingly grateful.
Speedy recovery sir.

[Anushka joshi]

It felt so soothing... And the metaphors are so beautifully painful, kinda.
Aj.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... two years later and you are having your
broken heart mended. The Roses buried in the Winter snow...
surely know that Spring will find you in the arms of the Weeping Willow
as Birds have gathered with the Camellia to pray for your Recovery.
The Pine Warbler with soft yellow feathers laments the days waiting for your poetry.
Be Still and listen to the Wind. tenderly, Pat

[Diana]

Beautiful, simple, peaceful.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Diana,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

A gentle velvety romantic write...and of course the metaphor is splendid. "I am a cloud moved to a standstill.".....heavy sigh! I really enjoy your romantic writes, Jacob. You don't write a lot of them. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi,
j.

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Something to learn from you when describing nature's beauty... It's so flowy and smooth.... I pick greens of her kindness.... Amazing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Sima,
j.

[Vertigo Cat1111]

Again, your writing really brings the reader into a whole other world. I love the mentions of different seasons. Whenever poems happen to bring different times up, it feels so much more personal like I'm actually experiencing the story. Especially when it's so specific, like 'early October breeze.' It paints a mental picture that's so nice you reread the poem. Even the title of the poem adds another layer to it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Colacat.
j.

[Ladysue]

this is a stunning read. Flowed with ease and beauty. Highly creative and eloquent. A sheer pleasure to read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ladysue,
j.

[poison&kerosene]

Your writing once again creates its own space in the world. I could get lost in your work sir. Great job as usual!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, poison.
j.

[Rose]

Wow! It paints a beautiful picture! I am definitely a fan of your poetry!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Rose,
j.