Why not

Why not

 

 

eradicate the injustice

love the hate that binds us

until ropes of oppression burn themselves out

 

and we are free to roam

against a gentle wind

loose ends

 

available 

to touch again

and only tie us apart

 

with affectionate knots

dangling together

 

under a new sun

with a much softer bond

 

not of suffocation

but of restoration

 

of what never was

and only thought it could be...

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/10/2020

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You did well my friend. Jacob. I like the energy and positive feel of the words.
"under a new sun
with a much softer bond
not of suffocation
but of restoration"
The above lines were cool. I could write a epic tale from. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry. I did like.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Cassie]

I wish it were as easy as it were for you when you wrote that poem, I imagine that writing comes easy for you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i feel like a fraud, Cassie...the muse visits me and I just write in bunches all at once...get in some kind of a zone...and I do not know where it comes from and really can't take credit for anything I write....feels like cheating, to tell you the truth.
thank you for your kind words,
j.

[Cassie]

hahahah you are a fraud, I also do that though, cheat alot

[Rose]

Your words are so fluent! They flow so smoothly and tell a beautiful story!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Rose,
j.

[X]

'A restoration of what never was...' Brilliant 💯💯💯

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Kira,
j.

[pearl]

The thought is really powerful! It’s refreshing to read the poem and it’s really timely.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, pearl,
'j.

[Tuskie Deb]

Hi Jacob,
These are powerful lines: (I'm taking out the spacing for ease in commenting)

Why not
eradicate the injustice (I don't interpret these words to mean C-19 but racial bigotry)
love the hate that binds us (we have to admit to it, own it, embrace it)
until ropes of oppression burn themselves out (and recognizing it, stop doing it!)

Poetry allows us to say powerful things in a few words, carefully chosen for the way they sound, the way they roll together, the mental images they create. It takes skill and time (and for me, time is a substitute for skill - 100 rewrites later I am half-happy with a poem I've written LOL!)

I really like this poem's message - the last stanzas:

under a new sun
with a much softer bond

not of suffocation
but of restoration

of what never was
and only thought it could be...

seem to look through these dark days we are in to a brighter future. So many of us are suffering as our families and friends go through this travail. We've seen this 'taste' of a change coming before and it's always collapsed. Reading your poem gives me hope that enough people on the 'outside' are on on 'our' side that change may come and stick this time. Very well written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I sure hope it can and will, Deb.
thank you for your words,
j.

[Dave]

Oh, what a happy day that will be. I'm so with you Jacob.
Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dave,
j.

[Dave Brown]

Although I have a problem with being serious, it is long overdue for things to improve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely overdue...thank you, Dave,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes this reminds me how domestic violence has increased over covid time’s, no sign of bringing closeness for some.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, that is definitely one of the other downfalls of this disease...brings another harsh disease to the forefront.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Although I plant flowers...
they slowly bear blossoms sweet...
The fragrance is free...

(A Haiku for you) why not... Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

aww...love this haiku, Pat.
thank you

[Patricia Wedel]

You are as welcome as the Frost that will be on my rose-tinted Heirloom Pumpkin when the Harvest Moon appears... gently, Pat