only what i made of it

only what i made of it 

 

the soft glow of your voice

the sound of your hair

tossing to a breezy light

 

I kissed the fragrance of you

when the moon was our only touch

quarters gave way to halves

 

and the shine never tasted so good.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/4/2020

Reviews

[duff]

That last line kept me coming back. Damn. Awesome work Jacob. I hope you're well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, duff.
Yes, hanging in there...teaching remote, but with microsoft teams so I can virtually be with my students...as close to being in the classroom as we can get...so I am grateful for that...
j.

[Fran Marie]

I kissed the fragrance
of you

That line alone
speaks love with an
ethereal essence
of that special someone..

such a soft rendering
of deep felt emotion..

nice write..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Fran,
j.

[barleygirl]

This is a lyrical flight on a moonbeam & I love it! The title is so right! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, dear friend.
j.

[Akshay Rawal]

This poem heads into pure surrealism. I like how you're being honest with the title of this poem... Only what I made of it. The reader gets an idea this is about a special moment of love in a poet's life, an out-of-world experience.

The feelings, sounds and visuals this poem invokes are so mild and soft and soothing, it all seems beautiful. "I kissed the fragrance of you" as if the subject is so special their illusory presence can be fallen in love with too.

"Quarters gave way to halves" shows everything found their better halves and united into a couple, presenting us an environment of harmony.

Feelings very invoked with limited words, that's appreciable :)

Thanks for sharing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your kind review, Akshay,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

So very romantic and dreamy! "The soft glow of your voice"....ahhhh, yes. Liked this one a lot. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you Lydi...this poem is more like you than it is me...
those romantic musings don't find me that often.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

But when the romantic muse strikes, it strikes so well! :)

[Weeping willow]

Such a beautiful write with a wonderful flow, can feel the images as they pass by ones eyes. Loved it and enjoyed the read of it. ;-]

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Willow,
j.

[Abhilash Hegde]

Ah! very well. I like the feel of this poem - soft, smooth and full of life.
Voice, hair, fragrance, touch - all of it, there's everything here we would want to experience.
Enjoyed reading it, Thanks j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Abhilash,
j.

[Anastasia]

In love I believe one wants to experience every aspect of a loved one in every possible way and it is from this yearning deep down that these words of your poetry stem. Its a longing to have all of them with all your senses. So you can see the softly glowing voice, hear the hair flying about and kiss the scent. There is nothing left to not touch or feel. I think that is the way love must feel. Thank you.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sabrina,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

A clever write Jacob, very nice indeed, liked the switch on the romantic emotions. It really boils down to the saying " what we bring to the table"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

Jacob, I had to read this a couple of times to realize that you are mixing up the senses to create a lovely flow of words, and quite romantic too. And, even though you cleverly mixed them up it still reads very well. It's like throwing the dice and whatever comes up is the winner, or mixing pastry with weird ingredients....it might just turn out right. Well done, Fondly, Betty

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love mixing weird ingredients...and appreciate you partaking...thank you, Betty,
j.

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re quite welcome my friend!