karma

karma 

 

 

commercialized, homogenized, harmonized

voices thrive in the cafe,

pure streaming coffee served with consonance

 

live sugars tossed into poetic cups

 

the words, the words, the words

stirred, 

danish served with dissonance 

 

apricot jam served with assonance

 

i am but a pasteurized version

of a poet's dream.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/4/2020 

Reviews

[Sami Khalil]

Whatever you write Jacob is tasty like this breakfast served poem and I hope from a fine Jacob's hotel. Continental, intercontinental with different types and tastes. I can see the good view from your hotel Jacob where souls enjoy nature's offerings and yours.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there are so many wonderful offerings here at the cafe...including yours, Sami, which i enjoy tremendously.
thank you,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Coming from you is an honor. Bless you sir. I hold you in high esteem. Thank you again.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I am afraid I must disagree with you on this one Jacob. Tis, as always, a poem with impact in its analogous wisdom but you, sir, are the furthest from sterile as a poet as it is possible to get.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too kind, John,
thank you.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Not at all Jacob. I could never look forward to reading anything from you if it were sterile and look forward (and learn) I do.

[barleygirl]

I believe your poem is written tongue-in-cheek, not meant to be a serious slam to the various formulaic trends found here at the cafe, however I caught a little different drift. My impression of the cafe -- mostly a block of well-established writers who each have their own niche way of presenting many of the typical topics that get written about time & again. I feel like a misfit among this crowd, since I hardly ever write about the stuff that most writers write about. This is what I feel as a wall of "commercialized, homogenized, harmonized voices" at the cafe. I love your snappy wordcrafting here! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Oh my goodness, yes, tongue-in-cheek...I would never slam another poet...I have no room to ever do that...
and you are no misfit, Margie...your work is delightful and fresh...
j.

[Cherrie Palmer]

Nay, not pasteurized, just not yet discovered, which inly purifies and legitimizes your words :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cherrie...for your kind words,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

Thank goodness those words are not spoken with the same voice. Different ways to look at things mean different ways to write. Each has something to offer and each can be interpreted as we see fit.

The only cafe to sit and share opinions without the necessity of raising voices or egos ... and socially distant as well.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Exactly, Ted...we are all different voices, and all are just as legitimate as the next.
j.