karma

karma 

 

 

commercialized, homogenized, harmonized

voices thrive in the cafe,

pure streaming coffee served with consonance

 

live sugars tossed into poetic cups

 

the words, the words, the words

stirred, 

danish served with dissonance 

 

apricot jam served with assonance

 

i am but a pasteurized version

of a poet's dream.

 

 

erin-cilberto

9/4/2020 

Reviews

[Akshay Rawal]

This poem is so self-aware, as if it describes itself, analyzes it's own literary elements, as it goes forward. I really liked the writing here, it rings along as we read it. It may not make perfect sense, but still it evokes those feelings, I felt like I was being served a delicacy.

Thanks for sharing.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Akshay, I appreciate your kind words.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

My oh my
This is beautiful
I love this

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Julie,
j.

[John the Baptist]

You forgot contractions and possessives (it's, its) served with confusion.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think I'm a contraction...:))))

thank you for the smile, John,
j.

[John the Baptist]

That came to mind for me because it's my main pet peeve regarding this site. Didn't anyone pay attention in English 101?

[Anastasia]

The combination of breakfast and dreams was something unexpected and very nice.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Sabrina,
j.

[BLACKCRUSH]

"i am but a pasteurized version
of a poet's dream." You're the real deal Jacob! Love your breakfast poems.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, BLACKCRUSH,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

So many different voices in the cafe. That's what I like, the variety of expression and style. It is all about the words and the impact those words have on the reader. Your words Jacob, have always stood out. From my first visit to the cafe you are the king of metaphor, but there are other poets too who stand out for other reasons. That is why I love this playground of ours so much. A diet without variety isn't nourishing. I wouldn't like a milkshake every time I visited, sometimes an apple juice or a lemonade just suits the occasion. Clever and impactful writing.


Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Yes, this playground is wonderful...so many different flavors of poetry tasted here.
thank you, Chris,
j.

[AJNJ]

I feel a stand alone poet may be a better thing than the harmonized, homogenized voices that come to my mind reading this. A poet's dream to me, would be raw, potent, consuming and not pasteurized and subdued. In that sense, you're definitely the former, dear sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Peston,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Karma is defined that we will be treated in the next life the way we have treated others in our present life. Unfortunately... we learn as we make mistakes... I like Shakespeare’s philosophy: “Although you have none... obtain a Virtue”. Hopefully... we understand all the Virtues. Life and the hereafter is full of Metaphors... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I would love to read those metaphors in the hereafter...
thank you, Pat,
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Poetry communities may make better poets; they will not, however, make great poets--
uniqueness cultivated in isolation seems to a more direct path.
I see you as not pasteurized, not homogenized, but organic--truly nourishing
to your consumers.
Clever work, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jimmy,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

"danish served with dissonance



apricot jam served with assonance"