a ship that has sailed

a ship that has sailed

 

 

arthritis flavored feelings

love's joints aching

with boredom

we once were a fling above the world

now long since landed

our intensity has turned flat

 

Columbus was wrong.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/15/2020

Reviews

[Laconic Meraki]

Well, you didn't sink .
And neither did your way with words.
-c

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Meraki,
j.

[Cassie]

This is laughable, you always have a way with words

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie,
j.

[Neville]

I still got ya back jacob ... a deal is a deal isn't it and we still got a long ways to sail yet my friend .. and when one can pen words like "we once were a fling above the world" .. a bloomin long way indeed ...

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A life lived to the full in full sail, with the passions of woman as crew, now yearned for as the bones of the ship creak and fill with water and the crossing globe days feel all done. A yearning piece needing analgesia!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, John,
j.

[Aradhana]

life is nothing without love indeed....Loved this one, sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, Aradhana,
thank you,
j.

[barleygirl]

Some people can't imagine growing old without a mate, even if such a coupling is without pizazz. I love how your poem reminds: everything that goes up must come down! I'm not sure what Columbus claimed . . . that the world's flat? Or NOT flat? Your metaphors are always spunky (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Margie,
j.

[Dave Brown]

it's not so bad the world being flat but I've often wondered what is on the underneath side and how far through it is

[jacob erin-cilberto]

me too...what is under there?

[Dave Brown]

tree roots and upside down cakes

[Wild Rose]

Upside down cakes?
I love them, do they have a mine unearthing them
Do they have a factory outlet there?

[Dave Brown]

We are currently fitting out a team of explorers to undertake an expedition to answer those very important questions
Stay tuned

[Wild Rose]

Pity I can't join in as I am still told not to mix

[Dave Brown]

( . ) .

[T.S. Ulmus]

A thought-provoking piece, the word "flat" juxtaposed with the final line that Columbus was wrong. I can't help but think the intensity was manifest destiny. Once you've conquered, what is there to do but apologize to those you crushed along the way.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yet do we apologize? Not often enough.
thank you, T.S.
j.

[T.S. Ulmus]

Your reply has me stirred, because I don't feel like I've conquered anything but Jack and s*** and Jack already left town. I'm not interested in apologizing for my mediocre life, and I never met this Columbus dude. You seem like a wise person and I'm always eager to accept wisdom. Feel free to drop some on me.

[Ankita Dwivedi]

This was really intense. I loved it. Please review some of my work. Hope you like it.:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Ankita,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

"We were once a fling above the world" High hopes, reduced to flat lining. That is some come down.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you for your words, Chris,
j.