secret

 

secret

 

 

 

the ornery silence

exudes from unwritten words

a lack of spacing

huddled together in hushed harmony

 

the ones we never pen

and cannot imagine onto the page.

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/17/19

Reviews

[light and ashes]

Harmony?
Doesn't sound like harmony to me, maybe forced harmony.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, perhaps, forced.
thank you, Allie...
taking a break...be back eventually...
but appreciate your visit...
keep well, my friend.

[light and ashes]

I do my best..... thank you.

[Beccy]

Once pen is put to paper, there are no secrets; although those wonderful poetical tools we so effectively hide behind, often serve to disguise the true meaning of a poet's words.

But I would have it no other way, for I find both great fascination and enjoyment in doing my best to interpret and understand what lies beneath the surface.

Beccy.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for getting this poet...I appreciate your words here, Beccy,
am taking a break...will eventually be back.
j.

[Beccy]

enjoy your break; and make sure 'tis a break not a severance. :))

[Coyote Poetry]

Powerful words and thoughts shared Jacob. I believe we cannot write down everything. Some blackness need to stay hidden. The unwritten words of Hemingway and Salinger showed the waste of war. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and here we were reading and commenting on each other's work at exactly the same time...must be Karma...thank you for your insightful words, Coyote.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

It is karma and you are welcome Jacob. Finally two days off in a roll. I can read and think.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Words that are never there--mystically described.
You portray their absence as if they were starkly present.
Quite a literary trick, Jacob!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy...
j.

[Nefertiti Virtudes Ahme..]

I don’t know why but I feel like this has a ominous truth to it. It’s eloquent in its own nature. Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Nefertiti...
j.

[kitty]

Behind closed doors ...they say the 'Secret' remains but does it always. There are those who are impatient for those secret trysts to be set free to the detriment of parties concerned!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, kitty,
j.

[kitty]

Don't mention!

[R.E. Ray]

“Ornery silence” is my favorite from this piece, J. They do seem to be the worst-tempered creatures, gnawing on our conscience, and they despise being caged. I suppose that’s why so few people can keep them.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, R.E.
j.

[Marie-Louise.]

How do you wriggle your way into the words Jacob? You seem to be able to get to the core of what you are writing about with the minimum of words. Each one purposely selected. You must have an incredible knowledge of the English language. Very clever.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i must confess, Marie-Louise...the words wriggle their way into me...i am just a conduit. I really don't know where they come from...i much more a conduit for the muse than a poet. I almost feel more like a plagiarist because i don't know anything except i usually pour out 4 or 5 at a time...get in a zone...and then suddenly it is over.
can't really take credit...but i feel lucky to get touched by the muse.
but thank you so much for your kind words.
j.

[emmajoy]

To write, to express 'make believe' is one thing, one thing only.. it's putting words to thoughts. To divulge a secret either one's own or someone else's is tantamount to putting words to personal emotions and thus, disloyalty to human spirit. Surely? Secrets are as sacred as oaths ...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, just as sacred...i totally agree, em.
thanks so much for your visit and words,
j.

[emmajoy]

You know i try to be attentive and aware of your poetry.. have sp many to review before the year's out, jacob. Might to take up permanent residency!

[CLR9]

Most people can't get it out in fear of scrutiny. Good stuff

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, CLR9---
j.