when beginnings find endings

when beginnings find endings

 

 

 

fraud ensues

accompanied by deceit

a liar's penchant

the pendant around his neck

the noose of lies getting tighter

 

she waits in the house

assured that he will eventually

come home 

with a lipstick conscience

gnawing at his bones.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/9/19

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

This reads like the other woman, the third party and the lady of the household has her suspicions and what better way to check the collar, a territorial trade mark of any outsider wanting in, and wanting the lady out! Then again I could be wrong! lol.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like where you took this, andrew....thank you for your surmise here...
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

Erin... a layering of lies is used in love and politics...
either way... there will be a Christmas Vacation and then,
we will determine the outcome... after Presents are given and received
and the World rests on its Laurels. Amen Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

amen to that, Pat...on both counts.
thank you,
j.

[Lorry]

This has very much of a Poefeel to it Jacob, where silence and not knowing how much the other knows is all the ingredients required to either the truth coming out, or insanity prevailing, consumed by his own lies and unable to follow his own fabled narrative.
Nothing known of the lady, but im sure im not the only one siding with her. You go girl!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lorry...and yes, good for her.
j.

[Cortez]

Erin, it sounds like you wrote this with clenched teeth. That’s why it’s so moving, descriptive and malignant . The reader empathizes with the writer. The deceit cannot be hidden

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Cortez.
j.

[Neville]

Every now and then, I come across a poem, or a bit o prose that captures my imagination and no matter how I try, I just can not put it to bed.... and this is such a fine example... and as much as I would like to ramble on about what it means to me and describe my own take on it... I am still very much under observation by my wife and under strict doctors orders to stay away from the computer ... Nice one though jacob.

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, you need to rest your eyes, Neville....but i do appreciate the read and pause to figure out your take...
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

The worst thing about cheating is having to produce a continual layering of lies.
One deeply troubled relationship artistically portrayed.
Impressive work!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, yes, so true....thank you, Jimmy,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Much to consider here, relatable too. A story rolled out for your readers. An unenviable position for her to be in. Cheaters normally get caught. Future doesn't bode well. I anticipate fireworks. Yes, one almighty display of seething colour :) I can hear those rockets already. What a blast.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your insightful review, Chris.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

A complete story in the poetry in so few words. The cheating heart shall be caught one day and maybe they can learn? Thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote, i appreciate your visit and words,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Einstein Noodle]

i like it ... the liar's penchant .. a pendant ... yes indeed .. such a betrayal is not something that is hid for very long ... that kind of guilt will not relent .. your protagonist in this seems to have a unique quality, jacob ... she waits for him and is satisfied with the gnawing as sufficient punishment .. not sure it is a wise choice ... but hey ... love covers a multitude of sin eh!? :) there is a lot going on in this 10 L 2 V poem .. so easy to create me own between the lines ... my empathy lay with the lady ... but .. kick him out says i!
E.
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and mine lies there as well, E.
thank you for your words...
j.

[John the Baptist]

Oh, what a tangled web we weave! One of these nights he may slink in to find her waiting in the darkness with a Glock.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, rough....thank you, John,
j.