stranded

stranded

 

 

 

Macrame endings

a square knot

tied down your loose frilly threads

too much for you

to be bound in lattice adornment

 

polished phrases

don't comply

or see eye to eye

with your dread of a thread

of commitment

 

would that you loved me back enough

we could have furnished our lives

with cozy slip knots

but you slipped away

 

into your frayed world of logic

and our

Macrame endings

 

sent me to find accord

elsewhere.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/4/19

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

This is really beautiful and makes me think of those large macramé wall hangings that you can buy. Beautiful from a distance, they encompass a lot of open spaces - a whole love of crevices for dust. If this is analogous of any relationship, perhaps it's best laying in the dustbin of history. They all fray with time any way. Your eyes always see with such a unique point of view. I really admire that.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate this review...it is better than the poem itself...yes, damn those crevices....never know what is hiding there.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

A slip knot, pretty lady can escape from.
"would that you loved me back enough
we could have furnished our lives
with cozy slip knots
but you slipped away"
I did like the above lines. Always a pleasure to read your work.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind comments, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[AYVID N]

Something so intricate takes a lot of commitment to create and there’s little scope for love when logic takes over and we are just left with ‘what ifs’. I love the delightful metaphors you used here Jacob. Beautifully written.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, DIVYA,
j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and as Petula Clark once sang.."there's a Cat in the Window"

[AYVID N]

:))) and she loves being noticed!

[R.E. Ray]

Perhaps strands from threads never truly knotted. I admit I wasn't familiar with the word, Macrame, so I looked it up. Interesting that "Macrame" uses knotting (rather than weaving or knitting) techniques, which makes this the ideal metaphor for marriage and other intimate relationships. Is that where "tie the knot" originated? I'm assuming so. Enjoyed this one, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

might have come from that R.E.
wouldn't be surprised...
thank you for taking the time to look that word up...wish my students would do that more often.
and thanks for your visit.
j.

[R.E. Ray]

You're welcome, J. And, if you didn't know, I am one of your "students."

[jacob erin-cilberto]

aw thanks R.E. that is so kind of you to say....i wish i had you in my class...you would be a great contributor to the discussions.
j.

[R.E. Ray]

If I'm ever in your area (I live in southeastern IN), I'll stop by, if only to confuse the class. "Who's the old guy in the back of the room?"

[jacob erin-cilberto]

actually you would fit right in...a community college with many non-traditional students....so come on in...

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... an unfinished sweater to hold your heart...
but then we had to part... after a never beginning love affair...
wondering why under a rainy sky-- the thunder rolled and
lightening struck where love should have grown... truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

geez, Pat....as usual....your reviews are so poetic...and in this case...better than the poem itself.
thank you for your visit and words,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

I really like the line "with cozy slip knots"...
it is important to do a lot of mooring to keep a
boat close to shore... without slipping away. truly, Pat

[Michael Oliver]

Love the pun - a great laughing groan at 'accord' Wonderful

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i figured someone would groan over that...ha ha...
thank you, Michael...you made my morning, my friend.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

So good Jacob. Some relationships are always going to end this way sadly. Your poem so visual and I kept thinking of knitting and dropped stitches leaving great gaping holes. Love lost in space. Like where you took me with this one.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and i like where it took you, Chris...as always, thank you for your thoughtful review on this poem...and your always thoughtful reviews in general.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Within this woven knit, she wanted no strings attached. Great writing J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[ms. barrie]

your ink so eloquently and in such a captivating way pierces
through the readers’ psyche and lingers. the imagery, always
uniquely compelling. i’m always in awe of your poetic artistry,
that it’s almost impossible for me to express

either way, it’s always a pleasure to re’visit your art.

thank you for sharing ~ x

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, barrie.
j.

[ms. barrie]

you’re so very welcomed, jacob