Cease Fire

Cease Fire

 

 

 

insurgence

you attacked my heart

with a hostile takeover

but we reached armistice 

in forgiving embrace

 

and now co-exist nicely

in what once was a war zone

some of the cosmetics of the skirmish

still visible

 

especially within,

war wounds woven seamlessly

into the fabric

of emotions that became shrapnel

 

before the duct tape forgiveness

brought about 

a desperate truce.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

10/23/19

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Duct tape (and wire-ties) fix most broken things, but everything leaves marks, even bandages. So true, especially with broken relationships. I've come to believe a cease-fire is not the worst thing, even with fresh scars. Good write, J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i agree...thank you for your words, R.E.
j.

[unsavable_soul]

Hey Erin,
I've missed your work, as usual another interesting well penned piece. This is something I can relate with in my life and I think so many can. I have a special appreciation for the direct yet poetic usage in this. I only found one question in it's ending. It seemed like the writing describes the pain of a relationship gone way south but that had found a better place, the very last line left me feeling that the "truce" was more necessity than desire, did I take that last line wrong? Glad to see you're still here.
US
100/100

[jacob erin-cilberto]

there is no right or wrong with poetry....poems speak to the reader as they will....as does this one and its last line for you...
sometimes we might love or stay in relationships because of need more than want...that is for sure...
thank you for your words...glad to see you around again.
j.

[unsavable_soul]

Thanks J.
I get taking personal meaning and truths from the art we take in it's what makes it art and not just history or fact. I always like to in addition of having a personal understanding have the true intent. I find sometimes knowing the intent of the writing helps me in opening my perspective more with future reads and my own writing. Thanks for the mystery. Better to live in uncertainty than with the absurdity of certainty.
US

[jacob erin-cilberto]

the absurdity of certainty...that would make a good line in a poem...it's so absurd to think we actually can ever be certain of anything.
j.

[unsavable_soul]

It's actually a well know philosophy quote from Voltaire - “Uncertainty Is an Uncomfortable Position. But Certainty Is an Absurd One.”
US

[andrew mitchell]

Duct tape fixes most things but not failing relationships beyond repair. Some cracks you just can't fill, they run too deep.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true...thank you, andrew.
j.

[John the Baptist]

Indeed, emotions can become shrapnel, even Bouncing Betty castration mines. It sounds as though in this one, however, that a cease fire was arranged and peace has been declared. Yes, forgiveness and duct tape both take care of many ills.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

In the words of that famous Canadian philosopher ... Red Green ... Duct tape; the handyman's secret weapon.
Sometimes they are terrorists and other times freedom fighters ... just depends on which side of the argument you landed. They attack the heart and leave you to crawl into that dark room to lick your wounds.

A good description.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Ted,
j.

[jasper]

What a graphic description of so many tragic relationships. Well done!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, jasper,
j.

[barleygirl]

Your soft-spoken placating poem shows the difference between a sweet forgiving tolerant person like yourself, making light of lingering scars & bloodstains . . . and an intolerant b***h like me who considers vistas choked with detritus of battle to be a deal-breaker! *wink! wink!* (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh, you are much sweeter than you let on, my friend...your poetry reflects that...you are a warm soul.
j.

[Dave Brown]

certainly an overabundance of war zones in existence
If only duct tape is available, I hope you are at least using the GORILLA brand!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

haha...thanks, Dave,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Wow, thinking on how long the duct tape will hold before the truce ends and the warfare restarts. That is what you call living on a knife edge. Not a good place to be Jacob. Living with the enemy


Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Chris,
j.

[CD Campbell]

Man, but that duct tape gives after a while and it seems your back to square one. I've been married quite some time and sometimes I wonder why the conflict has to flare up at the worst times. Say that five times fast. No, she's awesome, I think maybe I could use some of that duct tape and put it right over my mouth. Now that would start the beginning of a peace treaty. Ha. Great work as always. I tip my hat to you good sir.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh yes...saying those things we regret as soon as we say them...let the wars begin.
thank you for sharing and your kind words, CD.
j.