Poem

 

Poem

 

 

 

 

damn you,

cry me a river

the levee will hold

i have no sympathy for the devil

or you,

 

that current swept me up 

in the us

of it all

 

but white caps hid black lies

and time incriminated the back waters

of your burnt bridges

 

now no one wants to cross 

on you,

for you,

or with you

 

damn you

go ahead pour with the vain rain

of unhappiness,

i will wave at you in my kayak

 

river rafting past 

your bleak paradise

holding on tight

to what dignity

i have left.

8/17/19

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/16/19

Reviews

[gram linski]

another excellent poem from you, j. another tawdry tale of love gone wrong, washed/smashed upon the shore, but me thinks this time the poet won, been white water rafting, what an adrenalin buzz, bad lovin' is far worse, great musical references

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i bet it is buzz....thank you for your understanding words, gram,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... I have been on white water Rapids
with the Moon beams shining through the trees in
Maryland where I grew up and had my first child.
I was in a Canoe. When all is said and done... it
is the River that really matters. Now I live by the
Rappahannock River and watch others cry after
the moonlit rendezvous. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate what you shared here, Pat...thanks so much for showing me how you related to this poem,
j.

[Cherrie]

I have a mental image of you kayaking across this river

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh no, i am terrible at Kayaking...you must be laughing your head off.

[Cherrie]

We'll get ya trolling motor for it, so you can inspect the levee

[jacob erin-cilberto]

oh great, then i'll be labeled a Troll....:))))

thanks a lot!!!!!!!!!!

[Cherrie]

Just don't park under a bridge

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too funny.....how about under WC's bridge?

[Cherrie]

Well you can but if you do you will surely end up in someone's story.

[Lorry]

From the damn and cry me a river, I was already wondering if the dam would hold Jacob.
Being titled poem, I couldn't help but (miss) read the pain and frustration of writing, pouring out your soul as being a compulsion from within... But then again, a lady makes more sense, I think.
At the very least, I have discovered the need for breakfast before reviewing 😀

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i hope breakfast was good...always need breakfast...thank you, Lorry,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Empowering! Easy to be taken in my the charms of another till you realize what that person really is....darkness and evil intentions. Waving at that person from the kayak....yes, empowering. Seeya, bye! I like this a lot. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

To easy to get swept up in the rapids...struggling against the current until you can eddy out and catch your breath. The dam will hold...but best not be downstream when the gates are opened...could be hell on earth.
I have experience on both aspects of this allegorical diatribe.

A good write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for relating, Ted....but i guess unfortunate as well...
never a happy experience.read morethank you for relating, Ted....but i guess unfortunate as well...
never a happy experience.
thank you.
j.

[redzone]

damn Jacob, remind me not to get on your s^^t list.... a 'biting' piece of poetry.... 'off with their head'!!!

I like the Timberlake version of "Cry Me A River"... such a love/person often leaves us feeling like we have lost all dignity....

but with your kayak (pen), there is plenty of dignity in this poem Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Curt....a kind fellow poet as you? how could you ever get on that list?
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Anger and rebuke here Jacob, you've had enough of the tears. You didn't get with this one what was written on the tin. She didn't turn out to be the person you thought she was. Smacks of deception and lies. 'I will wave at you from my kayak, river rafting past', what a truly cutting remark that is. Great stuff.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, someone specific here...but the time has past...and now being removed, easy to write...thank you, Chris...
j.

[andrew mitchell]

What a song Cry me a river by Julie London and what a looker too! An angry poem on vanity reminiscent of Carly Simon's song You're so vain.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, so true...thank you, andrew,
j.

[Kay Salisu Titilola]

Beautiful piece here, J.
It really carried me along and I enjoyed it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Kay,
j.