two goodbyes too many

 

two goodbyes too many

 

 

when your bones went limp

was there still poetry stirring in your mind

did you try to write poems

with telekinesis driving your pen

when your bones went limp

did you remember our awkward kiss

two friends entangled in a tangle of confusion

laughing too hard for lips to meet

 

and then starting a long-distance relationship

with no letters,

because any we put together would create 

uncomfortable words and

 

more comfortable silences

when your bones went limp

was strength a missing theme

an undeserved climax

 

to your final poem?

something of me was lost

when i lost you

long before

your bones went limp

 

and only the blinking of your eyes

reminded us of your pages

 

ones i wish i could fill for you.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/7/19

Reviews

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It is strange how we lose a part of ourselves when we say those goodbyes..like we'd put something of ourselves in them to keep it safe, but rarely works that way. ..
I was moved by the rhythm of this piece. Beautifully written, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Yumna...
j.

[Alisa Js]

What a sad and heartbreaking piece...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Alisa,
j.

[gram linski]

There is nothing limp about dem bones, j. they have spine and character, filled with tender sad loss

[jacob erin-cilberto]

she certainly had that, gram...thank you,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Your muse is in a dark place tonight. Saying goodbye to a love is never easy, but if you are reunited only having to say goodbye again, it is a sharp knife cutting into your soul. The words of this one are so very sad....so painful. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your review reminded me of Karen Carpenter singing "goodbye to love"
thank you for your insightful words,
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

Beautiful sad sentiments loved it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Julie,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

A friend, maybe you wanted more but that awkward kiss put paid to that. First goodbye would have been difficult enough, but the second was the final goodbye. Death doesn't allow further possibilities. Poetry features heavily here. She is still with you in spirit, you still miss her. Very touching read Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you so much for your kind words, Chris.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

Lost love and one too many goodbyes have a way of wearing on the soul. Saying goodbye the first time not knowing whether or not you'd see her again, would have been tough...the second goodbye, even though years seperated the pair, knowing there could be no reunion was most difficult of all.
The cruel wasting of ALS...leaving the mind sharp & trapped in a body that has become a prison...unable to put words to paper...to communicate...

A powerful write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you saw it....yes, ALS...thank you for your kind words, Ted,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

This feels like a eulogy to a departed poet or lover that once more has that feel of regret and loss tatooed across the page in deft words.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John.