Fight

Fight

 

 

a flurry of 

verbal jabs

knocked me out

 

i'm on the canvas

looking up,

at you

 

smiling in your corner.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/4/19

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

I love it when a few well placed words can turn a conversation around. We need more fiery words to knock us out these days. Good one, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, CD...appreciate your words on this not so popular piece...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I felt the pain here from that knock out blow. The smile from the corner rubbed salt into the wounds. Great metaphor.

Verbal assaults can cause lasting damage.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Chris,
j.

[drew garner]

I really love this one, I would use this as a textbook example of what a good short poem is. imagery, purpose and all with just twenty words. The foundation of the western poetic tradition we inherited from the greeks. It's competitive beauty like sharks on the hunt.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for this very kind review, drew,
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Good morning Jacob. In the corner stands a boxer.................Another great metaphorical write. Short and sweet, pithy even, but with a terriffic punch!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John....
sure is slow today and tonight here at the Cafe,isn't it?

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Tis early morn here Jacob. I was up at 05:00 and it is mow just after 06:00. A very peaceful time of contemplation. Think the place will pick up soon as Chris will be up and about soon lol!

[Chris Shaw]

Good morning John and good late night Jacob :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

good morning Chris...

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Mornin' Chris, Good night Jacob!