a garden with no sunshine

a garden with no sunshine

 

 

i was running

i heard rumors of chaos

behind my bloodied ears

my head exploded

concussions of coerced words

ended up splashing onto lily white pages

 

but the flowers weren't white

they were crimson and black

as the nights have been in aftermath

 

so much so

that the moon is hiding

in the heart of darkness.

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/5/19

Reviews

[kitty]

In our present climate, anything is possible. We are now experiencing changes in the weather that is astounding mankind giving us reason to question prophesies coming to pass. Profound read here!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, kitty,
j.

[kitty]

Pleasure' mine my friend!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

I am thinking bout all there terrible massacres that have been occuring.
Just like the moon I hide my head in shame of what our country has become.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we are all hiding our heads from fear and angst, Dale.
thank you,
j.

[John the Baptist]

This can only be referring to the horrific massacres these last days have seen. Stanza one is a nod to the victims as well as a notation of the "coerced words" that certain politicians are finally being forced to speak. The last stanzas are grim images of the seemingly endless dismay we are feeling now. The nod to Conrad at the end is sums it all up very well. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

I think baseball has been replaced as the great American pastime...and there are no winners.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, when you stop to think, i think your statement may be right....but i would rather be watching a baseball game when eating my hot dog and drinking my soda...yes,there are no winners.
thanks Ted,
j.

[wordman]

and it never ceases to end,a way of life it seems

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, unfortunately...thank you, wordman,
j.

[wordman]

you`re welcome jacob

[Lorry]

Love this Jacob, especially the ending, which most of us will be admiring, but secretly wishing we had thought of it to help explain what we are all trying to do, make sense of our own personal darkened thoughts.
An explosion of nightmarish fears our mind throws at us, when all we crave is one splash of brightness.
I give the teacher an A+ on this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lorry,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

you painted it again jacob..absolutely stunning contrast of white pages, coerced words and bloodied crimson and black flowers .. oh how your poem makes me pine for that hidden moon ..went out with the dogs at 3AM ... and she was nowhere to be found ;(((((((((((((((((((((((((((
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, E.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Reliving the atrocities of recent mass shootings can catupult one into a dark place, espeically when one is largely helpless to challenge the way things work. Once again you cover the page in the emotion of it all in amazing word choice and the images you project in this freeverse Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John,
j.

[Neville]

this is terribly sad jacob and a most fitting and apt post, on the back of so much recent bloodshed and carnage.... I myself shed a tear and devised a brief embu for the victims and their loved ones.. indeed for the whole of your country at this most difficult time...

Neville

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville...no matter where it happens it is just as tragic and damaging to a way of life that should feel free and safe.
j.

[Neville]

I wholly agree ..

Neville

[Chris Shaw]

'the moon is hiding
in the heart of darkness'

She doesn't want to see the carnage. After the dark comes light, after night comes day, it is always that way. After the chaos eventually there will be order. A really sad poem. Running away from violence, that's straight out of my dreams. I understand that running.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your understanding, Chris.

j.