With apologies to Mendelssohn

With apologies to Mendelssohn 

 

 

inciting a heart to riot

kissing the signs walking in lines

cheeks blush with rebellion

 

standing skin to skin

voices heard,

in unison

as one

 

men in blue

witness

judge accedes 

 

shots ring out

they falter

as bullets of mistrust

penetrate

and love bleeds

 

neither side knowing who started it

neither side cares

 

they are divorced of feelings

the cause diminished

the signs disappear

 

 

love ceases its march

as a nation of two weeps.

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/29/19

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

Love is a battlefield. A bloody one at that when it looses its essence. We can analyze the symptoms, but not fully understand the cause.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

exactly....what is the cause? usually a flawed one...
thank you, Wondering Mind,
j.

[Neville]

this is terribly good sir as I am sure Mendelssohn would be obliged to concede... so no apology required...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville,
j.

[Neville]

pleasure's all mine

[andrew mitchell]

Had the imagery to remind one of war of the roses! And that Russian novel love and war! Lovely writing J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Yes, he would have wished for more as composer of the Wedding March. There's a right war of words and sniper fire going on in this relationship. I'm left thinking, for goodness sake call a ceasefire. Truce, show the white flag. Felt the bullets here.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Chris...
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Indeed civil war between two is a sad enough cause as love fractures. you take us through stanzas that are enlightening and evocative of love and war.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.