in perfect insult

in perfect insult

 

 

the irrelevant have no money

but a lot of nerve

tarnishing beautiful subdivisions

with perfect houses

and perfect people

who live in them,

with perfect lawns

enjoying perfect dawns

 

eating caviar in perfect cadence

through picture windows

glaring at the indigent souls

who dare pass through their yards

and their conscience

leaving footprints

on the perfect lawns

of the perfect houses

of the perfect people

who live in them

 

perfectly rich

with perfectly plastic smiles

who turn from the picture windows

with perfect frowns

watching their perfect world

turn upside down

and inside out

 

those obnoxious

indigent souls

tarnishing beautiful subdivisions

with perfect houses

and perfect people

 

in perfect insult.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/13/19

Reviews

[Ted Kniffen]

This reminds me, in a way, of an old Malvina Reynolds song from the 60's 'all the houses made of ticky-tacky and they all looked just the same'
My 'perfect lawn' is riddled with Creeping Charlie and dandelions...the windows need cleaning and squirrels inhabit my soffits.
Not much perfect in this world.

A good write, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your house sounds perfect to me...lived in...welcoming...too perfect is like a museum not a house,read moreyour house sounds perfect to me...lived in...welcoming...too perfect is like a museum not a house,
thank you for sharing that, Ted,
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

No, not a museum...95 yrs old...the house, not me...full of creaks and groans...me, not the house...and a constant work in progress.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are too funny, my friend...
yes, i am feeling some of those creeks and groans...tennis staves some of them off...

[barleygirl]

This is so perfectly perfect. It expresses my lifelong reverse-snobbery perfectly. In my last job, I was part of a team redesigning the company website. They wanted to personalize it by introducing "real" people who work there. Every personal profile was of a white college-degreed person in mgmt, even tho this being an agricultural company, most are field or factory workers. That project gutted me out, as far as being able to stomach this kind of s**t. I never even looked at the f****n' website once after it was done! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i don't blame you...when people get into the upper echelon it often seems they lose their "real-ness"
thank you for sharing how you relate...
j.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Ain't this the truth. You said it with perfect directness.
So sad that those with money tend to flaunt it cause they think they are better than others.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Dale,
j.

[Jon Roggie]

Since I tend to veer towards the irrelevant, I can't help but consider myself one of those obnoxious, indigent souls. I can live with it.
Nice one, jacob.

Jon

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am too...so we both live with it...thank you, Jon.
j.

[Perdition]

Ah..my old friend the great strange trespasser..."trust in the strange", I always think for it is there with great purpose yet known. Looking at the new subdivision in a conscious light, that is the poet's responsibility and not one taken lightly here..respect for that. Thanks J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Perdition...
j.

[TheJordBaker]

I love the use of 'perfect' here- it ironically captures the perceptions of classes and 'perfect insult' is a paradox in itself.
Great work

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, JordBaker, Nice to see you around again after all this time away.
read morethank you for your kind words, JordBaker, Nice to see you around again after all this time away.
j.

[TheJordBaker]

Thank you, glad to see you're still posting

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Have to be, Jordan, this is my poetry home, surrounded by such good people and so much inspiration...keeps my poetic blood flowing.
j.

[Laura Kate]

I love the repetition of the word ‘perfect’ - the one word whose definition and meaning does not ever truly exist! Perfect people in absolute ignorance, blaming the less than perfect for tarnishing their outlook. Clever how you use plastic smiles as if the impression of perfect is all a facade anyway. I really enjoyed this!
Laura

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Laura...
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

some are aren't they jacob :( and some aren't :) “With great power comes great responsibility.” Uncle Ben ... "The Amazing Spider-Man" ... i guess those that aren't haven't read the rag yet. :( your poem has me noodle tinkin' this morning jacob ... poor stewards of what we have , i suppose, can be found all along the spectrum ..that kind of selfish disregard probably has a tendency to turn more physically violent though ..for the anger and frustration of lack ... hmmmmmmm inspiring and thought provoking for me sir! clear cut scene ..angst and character builds as i read ... makes me turn inward .. one can always do more ..
E.
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really appreciate your words, E.
thought this one might be too loose...
thank you for giving me some justification for writing it.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

;) ......................

[Chris Shaw]

Trespassers disturbing the equilibrium of a peaceful neighbourhood. Upsetting the balance and the atmosphere. That's where you took me Jacob. They need evicting.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and thank God for them doing that...
thank you for your words, Chris.
j

[Chris Shaw]

I should have added that this can be read on several levels. Both political, historical and closer to home came to mind.