the truth of windows

the truth of windows

 

 

 

the laughing draft

chills my soul's window

the glass frosting

from your indifference

 

i smiled through that glass once

and could almost touch you

through the pain

but you pulled the shades

 

and the sunlight hid its heart.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/7/19

Reviews

[andrew mitchell]

Its terrible to be shut out and almost boils down to the fact that not everything lasts and our ideals are not in sync in today's real world of indifference. Nice cold chilling write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[HadesRising]

A very profound exquisite piece of poetry, Well Done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Well, rejection sucks, and that's a fact. The use of cold and windows is very effective here, because they symbolize indifference and barriers. The speaker's plaint is made more painful by the now shattered hope of coming close emotionally. But the other "pulled the shades." I think, though, that what is seen as rejection now may one day be regarded as having dodged a bullet.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really agree with your last sentence...it has felt that way several times...thank you, John.
j.

[Fran Marie]

A heartfelt piece so beautifully expressed through the pain of rejected love,perhaps..nice work Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran,
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

Very touching poem. c: Kind of sounds like a poem towards an antisocial person.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, JungLee,
j.

[Fran Marie]

you're welcome

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I do not think there is anything you could not use to describe your pain at this loss Jacob. But this one I see clearly and it made me glaze over lol!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.

[gram linski]

On the wrong side of the mirror, looking out, great poem, j. reflections in the window pane

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, gram...
j.

[Mary]

Exactly how rejection feels. Exceptional write!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mary,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Time moves on and relationships change. This was a relationship which disintegrated into pain but there was still some hope. She changed that making sure that glint of light was eradicated completely. No sunlight and happy here. Leaves this reader feeling that this is a universal theme. Sad poem, great writing.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris,
j.

[kitty]

Fine things windows. They can be useful for looking in or out...depending on one's perspective of life. Windows of our soul. Windows of hope to the prisoner clinging on to the dream of freedom. Soul searching piece. Well written and meaningful. Thank you for sharing Jacob

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, kitty,
j.

[kitty]

My pleasure!