the truth of windows

the truth of windows

 

 

 

the laughing draft

chills my soul's window

the glass frosting

from your indifference

 

i smiled through that glass once

and could almost touch you

through the pain

but you pulled the shades

 

and the sunlight hid its heart.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

7/7/19

Reviews

[Robert Trakofler]

what a b***h.... its so like her! next time i stand outside the window and nab

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i might do that, too..thank you, Bunny...
j.

[Relic]

I like the pain reference. Your poems are never bad Jacob, Keep it up. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Relic.
j.

[MomzillaNC]

Your imagery is beautiful and heartbreaking. Indifference hurts deeper than anger or tears.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, MomZ...
j.

[MomzillaNC]

YVW 🌞

[Jade]

Such a wonderful little write, wonderful imagery as well

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jade,
j.

[Shy Joe]

Guess there can be more than Christmas in July. And more is not always better. At least you can have all the bad socks you want to wipe that frost from the window. A convenient indifference.

A pleasure as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, i will check to see where my bad socks are...thanks for the read and the smile, Shy Joe.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

poignant slap in the face ... giving it a go your protagonist smiles ..Maybe????? but no ... and the sun goes out :( a Charlie Brown character ... never quite gets up ... funny thing tho .. I have never met anyone that does not like Charlie Brown ;) deeply painful write says i! pushes some off the cliff ..
E.

[Gee]

Ahh rejection. Have had this from both wealth and intelligence, luckily for me though not love or happiness.
Good morning my favourite teacher, hope you are wel! :))

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, Gee...for your kind words..
hope all is well in your neck of the woods, too.
j.

[Gee]

All good thanks. Just off out with the pooches.

[Ted Kniffen]

How does rejection feel? It feels like thick frost on a window pain. Light filters through, but you can't see the sun. You could spare a kiss but your lips would freeze against the glass.
Looking into a window could make you a pervert...looking out could mean agoraphobia and you're an introvert...I guess, either way, you're a vert.
Sometimes all you can do is drop the blinds.

Take care friend.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i love this review...i guess i am a vert...Yes, rejection does feel like lips frozen to the glass..and then drowning in a glass of wine.
j.

[Ted Kniffen]

A large glass, colour doesn't matter.

[apennylate]

Feels like it pulls from the depths of the types of worlds, Through the Looking Glass, came come...
A haunting stage, windows and frost...
Always such an incredibly powerful image
Does the sun thaw, or is it another glass-wall...
So chilly...

[apennylate]

Came from*

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Silente.
j.

[apennylate]

Absolutely, a treasure to have your writing, mate

[Neville]

Beautiful & sad.. One might say beautifully sad.... and mean it....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Neville,
j.

[Neville]

my pleasure jacob.

Neville