aisles, i'll's, and isles between

aisles, i'll's, and isles between

 

 

 

imagine

if a touch didn't ignite

if lips met, there was just indifference

if words of sentiment were absorbed into deaf ears

if eyes didn't lie

if arms couldn't quite reach

 

imagine

then

look at me

 

look at you

 

and forget we ever said

"i do"---

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/28/19

Reviews

[Fairy Khan]

I just don’t have the right words to express how much I love this piece of your writing. Amazing work here.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

wow, thank you for your kind words, Fairy...and for bringing an oldie back to the surface for another look.
j.

[Fairy Khan]

You’re welcome, Jacob.

[Onlyme]

A very sad sobering poem of love gone wrong.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Dawn.
j.

[Verse]

The line that breaks my heart when reading this is

If words of sentiment were absorbed into deaf ears

That’s an ocean of cold water between you, my friend. Here’s wishing happiness for both of you and the partners you choose in the future.

Your sadness reached into every one of us, Jacob. Amazing write.

V

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Verse....actually the inspiration is taken from past relationships..rather than current...but appreciate the thoughts...
j.

[Bluebird]

The title in itself gives a great depiction of drifting apart

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you!

[Lydia Shutter]

From the first attraction to the point of not caring anymore and getting a divorce....your words take us through it all. I like the word play in the title! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi..
j.

[Shep]

a very real and realistic poem full life and intrigue the was meant to share between two people caught behind closed doors. Awesome write,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Shep.
j.

[kentuck14]

J,
Think I got the meaning in your title. The wedding bliss . . . the marriage blues, and everything that tries to come between, the loss of passion, caring and the desire to stay in the midst of change.
T.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful review, Tom,
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

Having a relationship is hard. I enjoyed it a lot! Had a nice touch!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, JungLee,
j.

[NotUsinganymore]

You're wecome c: Please check out my new poem 'Women and men' you might like it or not haha

[Chris Shaw]

Complacency, lack of intimacy and bingo you've hit the unhappy jackpot. Relationships are difficult. They have to be worked at, they can not be allowed to meander aimlessly like my poetry:) I shivered as I read your lines Jacob.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your reaction...sorry to make you shiver, Chris.
j.

[emmajoy]

May a woman speak without being told to disappear, please? What happened to ' it takes two to tango', j.? How sad it is when either one forgets the steps, slips then - skids to a halt. Does that mean the music stops, the echoes gone forever? The heart's merely another part of human nature, surely... just as pain is. The run to the exit might - if a key still be in the lock, be less trap than a means of stepping across space and trying to find what went AWOL. Perhaps?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, perhaps so...yes it takes two...and sometimes only one is trying...thank you for your insights, em.
j.

[emmajoy]

Makes me sad to read such poems, never know whether to share my thoughts or not.. After all am supposed to be here as a reviewer of use of language and so forth. Your language is always on the nail, apparently your outlook or put so finely, it appears so.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

I appreciate all of your thoughts, em...always...no matter what they are...poetry belongs to the reader...and the reader's reactions are what really count...not so much the poet who wrote the words.
j.

[emmajoy]

Thank you, that's truly gracious, j.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

just facts!!!!!! and thank YOU for the visit, my friend.

:))))