Becoming

Becoming

 

 

and thus he finds solace in a cloudburst

the rain could be his own tears multiplied infinitely

his flesh now sits burned in marmalade ash

 

resin of a rebirth

the heart accepts

with non-defiant regard

 

the child with lightning reaction

opposed,

screamed

despised at times, the weather a father forecasts 

for a son,

 

but now the sky has a certain clarity

the droplets sting his welcoming skin

as well as that parchment soaking

from the tears of his heart--

 

they are each other now

there's always time for breakfast...

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/26/19

Reviews

[Onlyme]

A beautiful poignant sad piece of poetry. That is heartfelt, emotional and sentimental. Yesteryears of times that once were full of joy and happiness and now. Just reminders of those times well spent with family and children.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Dawn,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

There is not only sadness here I feel there may have been friction in earlier years over choices. Time is a great healer, we see through the eyes of a parent as we become older, even though we are still the child.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you are astute, my friend...thanks for understanding,
j.

[Neville]

I sense a certain lingering sadness here my friend... I wonder hope and pray, if not too far off mark.. whether writing helps... I know it does me.. just askin, coz I'm curious and coz I care... N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

never off the mark, my friend...thank you for your words, Neville.....often what i write has to do with the past....but there is a certain cathartic nature to writing, always.
j.

[Neville]

bless ya jacob my friend.. I share that view too.
N.

[Dave]

Sometimes it takes almost a lifetime to appreciate the lessons a father tries to teach. Sometimes the lifetime passes on and the memory of the lesson is forgotten along with the father. Then, unfortunately its too late and the remembrance is filled with regret. Very strong statement - Jacob.

Take care - Dave

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, Dave,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You shared words, places and life. A hard journey described. Lessons learn, good and bad. Make us what we become. Thank you Jacob for sharing the powerful words and thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Mrudula Rani]

I detect sad undertones in this poem. The loss, accepting of eventuality.... and moving on with life, carrying the burden of memories. That's the picture I received from reading your words, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that, Mrudula....definitely in there as you saw...
thank you for the kind review,
read morei like that, Mrudula....definitely in there as you saw...
thank you for the kind review,
j.

[Mrudula Rani]

You are most welcome.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

The opening stanza is sublime in setting the scene. He has been through much but defiantly lives on and even enjoys life at long last. As always a thinkler to set images swirling and sending the imagination into overdrive.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, John,
j.