the most important meal of the day

the most important meal of the day

 

 

napkin notes on the kitchen table

leftovers of us

packed in suitcases

goodbyes only refrigerate for three days

before going bad,

 

but your love's expiration date

picked up the pen

the day i bought it.

 

now i am using that napkin

to wipe away the mess

my eyes made.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/16/19

Reviews

[barleygirl]

This is one of the best "goodbye" poems that I've read of yours. Your analogies coalesce into a sparkling "whole" that delivers the sad enchilada with sauce dripping red. I especially love the opening where you suggest the way a couple slowly becomes ships passing in the night, or rather, passing morning notes (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i do like enchiladas...thank you for your insightful review, Margie,
j.

[john l smith]

Another sophisticated write.
Because I am terrible at interpretation, I can at best wonder if a refrigerated rejection makes for a frosty goodbye!
Sorry
I'll just stick to trying to make words rhyme which is difficult enough for me to do.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, a frosty goodbye....exactly,
thank you, john.
j.

[Mrudula Rani]

You take your readers through an empty home that has nothing but memories and fragrance of pain, nothing else to nourish a liaison.... " goodbyes only refrigerate for three days before going bad." Out of sight out of mind! Isn't it?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mrudula,
j.

[lizardbrain]

wow... I love that line - "goodbyes only refrigerate for three days.." makes me think of the way our feelings can change when we have too much time to think over them. not thinking at all and just picking up the pen being the alternative.. and the one i much prefer.. good one :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like that alternative, muchly...yes..
thank you for your insights,
j.

[andrew mitchell]

The degustation was short lived and only one wanted desert or afters. And you can only guess who picked up the tab to do the dirty dishes as stark reminders. Entertain8ng as always with room for interpretation, food for thought!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply was even more entertaining...thanks for the smile, andrew,
j.

[kentuck14]

Great lines here J.! Another love gone away!? I like the way you end with the same image you started with.
Tom

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Tom, appreciate your visit and words,
j.

[Papaya]

the most important meal of the day is that one that was your favourite and you only have leftovers now and even though you may want to hang on to them to make them last it's best to just get it over with before they spoil. closure is a good thing, not good to drag it out. just my own weird interpretation of your poem. :) sometimes I don't even know if I make sense to anyone but myself.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your interpretation, works very well into the piece, thanks so much Ana....love the insight...
j.

[Stella Armour]

i think you were generous enough to live in hope for those three days Jacob whilst she had no notion of returning. Sometimes we do hang on to things for a long time to keep the memory sweet .. on our part anyway.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights,Stella...
yes, we do hang on to things, stubbornly sometimes...read morethank you for your insights,Stella...
yes, we do hang on to things, stubbornly sometimes...
j.

[Cassie]

awww ohhh Jacob, your pen is so so young, how i love this.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Cassie,
j.

[Annie Gryphon]

this one is very touching without making too many words, it is pure and also full of meaning, i like it.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Annie,
j.