indeterminate language of us

indeterminate language of us

 

 

give me nothing of you

and will still feel like i have everything

even just the little somethings you reserve

those could be anything i desire to capture

 

when all things are taken into consideration

i at least had a glimpse

of that one thing we could have been.

 

 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

2/16/19

Reviews

[Ranger Kessel]

I am liking your words this day. Well penned and the meaning is dripping not oozing. Nailed it

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your extended visit and kind reviews, Ranger,
j.

[John the Baptist]

Might have beens are some of the saddest words in the language. This one has the sound of the aftermath of something that had great promise, then was gone. It appears to have faded except the memory, and the speaker is clinging to that. Release is difficult, but ultimately it is the only answer.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your insights, John...thank you so much.
j.

[Onlyme]

Keeping hope alive a glimmer of optimism and faith mixed inside an interminate language of us.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Dawn...
j.

[Onlyme]

:).........

[Neville]

a doleful tale indeed, and yet so very clearly sung....beautiful in a sad kind of way ...

N.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville,
j.

[Lorry]

Now that is pretty spooky Jacob. For a start, you did write yours first and now I feel like awful. Firstly for not reviewing earlier and secondly for the feeling I must have came across yours without paying attention, because what the hell are the odds of coincidence? I am just so grateful that they are about different things, but that's freaking me out even more towards the odds of coincidence.
We should definitely put on lotto tickets tomorrow and see if the weirdness carries on :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Please Lorry, do not feel awful...it was strictly coincidence...the poems are different...only the -"things" are similar"--
yes, Lotto tickets for sure...:)))

[Lorry]

Well I'm hoping it is an omen, as the euromillions draw tomorrow is £150 million (about $190million) I reckon i'd be able to only work part time with that :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

Such devotion to a notion of another. To feel you have gained so much from so little is indeed a state of mind. We can feel strongly for someone who shows no interest in us and it can be very tough.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true...thank you, John,
j.

[Robert Trakofler]

ouch that one hurts a familiar ring tone to these giant bunny ears... Why we always want what is so hard to get, Miss what is right in front of us and forget what was given simultaneously? Its like that little kid and the cookie jar on the top shelf for grown ups. Sorry for the pain in this

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i appreciate your insights, Bad bunny, thank you,
j.

[Stella Armour]

Desperate for just a tiny acknowledgment from her, and does she know it would mean the whole world to him? ... Well i think she does and she is playing at dangling carrots.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Stella,
j.

[Papaya]

very powerful stuff Jacob, sometimes I wonder if that glimpse is a flicker of hope that motivates us to keep trying or will it ultimately destroy us trying for something we can never achieve

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ana,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

oh my goodness jacob!! i still feel the horrible loss experienced and made sharper by those bits of scrap tossed to one who has lost reason for loving another ... so lopsided i begin to limp .. and stumble along like Quasimodo ... though Esmeralda was not unkind ... and the Hunchback wasn't looking for anything to gain ... so perhaps could live in the joy of loving another without sense of danger ... poignant, sharp scene .. points straight to those "romances" that pricked me in just such a manner ... well done says i!
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review...and yes, that is such a good story...he only thought of her well being.
j.