unwanted sabbatical

unwanted sabbatical

 

 

arduous passion

skin razed against the night

compulsive angles to love's insistence

but the river of eve has run its course

no tributaries left to draw from

as the heat pools into smaller eddies

and the pillows talk

of sincerity's leave of absence

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

1/17/19

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Nice movement of thoughts. Many of the statements. Lead for some more words. Thank you Jacob for sharing your amazing words and thoughts.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I liked this one and you are welcome Jacob.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I love your use of water.
You can see the couple moving away from the source of their strength. No more on the river, and now they have walked through the last catch pool. Dehydration is certain as they wonder how it all went wrong.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your analysis, Cherrie, thank you.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Relationships end, when there is nothing left, then it's time to move on. Pointless trying to stoke up dead embers.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

so true, thank you, Chris.
j.

[redzone]

the flames roar, then flickers, then dies, especially when sincerity leaves of far away places.. I guess the real damage is to the heart which becomes smoldering ashes.... it hurts deeply when this happens... and we are left with 'why does this happen'?... agree with Lydi about the pillows, who witness everything... but it is you Jacob who tells their stories, since you have the poet's pen.

it's Saturday morning and besides needing another cup of coffee, I find myself wanting to go find some rainbows... lol... instead though today is supposed to bring lots of snow and ice.....

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, snow and ice here also....thank you for the read and the words, Curt,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

When the river runs dry, it's time to accept reality and move on. Without sincerity and truth, a relationship can not survive. Like the personification of the pillow! Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Lydi, appreciate your words,
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

"...sincerity's leave of absence" is, indeed, an "unwanted sabbatical."
While I certainly believe in free will, doesn't it sometimes feel as if we suddenly
find ourselves off-script, with no way to further the initial narrative?
Insightful poem, J!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy,
j.

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

Hmmmm- if only the pillows could speak what a story they would tell- times change life goes on - we dont always understand or want what we get but the angels know...sometimes its a blessing🌹

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words,
j.