drops of pain

drops of pain

a raucous rain

fondled the feral trees

in winsome wind

erin-cilberto

12/21/18

Reviews

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A clipped piece packed with bursting imagery Jacob. Have missed your mastery of English. 4-6-4 not sure of the form, what is it?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Thank you, John. No particular form here, just three lines as it came out...maybe Nearly Senryu? :)

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A Jacobu then!

[andrew mitchell]

A breeze of brevity. Compact and clever.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

You have given me some vivid imagery Jacob with your words. Brevity with brilliance.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Chris.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Good to see you on the forum again Jacob. Take it easy.

Chris

[Mark Mendoza]

A divine gift such as the wind, breezes by a tragic pain such as rain, as if to tell the trees "all things pass".So much spoken to me with few lines .

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Mark,
j.