new currency of old love

new currency of old love

 

 

 

in the substantial woods

of my inner sanctum

the foliage protects my vital interests

and keeps a sane balance in my account

 

i find the red maples remind me of deficits

in spending time with you, 

as autumn arrives in its interim

and then the barren investment that is winter

 

overdraws what emotions i have left

because i have become dense in autonomy

and fail to feel the breeze

that sifts through me 

with such minted memories of you.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

12/7/18

Reviews

[Onlyme]

Eloquently expressed and pure poetry, to my ears and heart. Loved it dear Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Dawn.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... the red maples “being in the ‘red” ... how about the term “green backs” ? ! Now I am on a Roll.... Very clever... As ever, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Pat.
j.

[Sami Khalil]

Wow! What an original idea. The romance bank compared to winter. Invest in the spring of love with all its foliage to find the winter of cold emotions and barreness. I guess the account has been closed and this bank no longer in business. Marvelous writing sir Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Sami,
j.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome.

[Einstein Noodle]

really like the opening two lines ... vulnerable and open invitation into a very private, cherished place ... the red maples line surprised me ..never a deficit says i! but the next line clarifies understanding .. alas..winter does come ;( your speakers confession is perhaps a brutal honesty "... i have become dense in autonomy" .. sad ...but some memories also console us
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, E,
j.

[Mark Mendoza]

Feels as if we are walking in each others prints in snow.
Love immured,in mind
In soul .
Your poetry is a testament to the joys of writing and experience itself.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind words, Mark,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of Autumn to make the poem understandable to the reader.
"as autumn arrives in its interim
and then the barren investment that is winter"
Great use of description for the turning of Winter. Thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.