snowmen and wonder lust

snowmen and wonder lust    

 

 

 

interludes of you,

white snow

in little flakes on a corrupt dresser

 

straws for drinking in the mirage

top of the world delights

make for violent ends

when the drink spills out of reality's cup

and she loses the handle on it

 

coaster hearts bleed in the end

the red somnambulist slips on iced misgivings

 

he loves her blind

yet, 

she only longs for another

sniff of winter.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/23/18 

Reviews

[lov]

Thats so honest and beautiful. Your words are gold.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, brokenwriter.
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Relationships are rarely equal -- one side nearly always more devoted than the other --

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lyn,
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... “straws for drinking in the mirage...”. if we remember back to grade school and high school... all the tears because we had a crush on someone. I would go home and cry. But that is the way we are made... for love and affection. Now I smile and remember. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Pat,
j.

[Ardra]

Nicely done....even if we love blindly.....what's the use when in the end they walk away as if there was nothing to start with.....
:)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Ardra,
j.

[Relic]

Oh yeah, I've got enough in my background to recognize this. I see and have seen people destroy themselves or watch loved ones do it to themselves. The picture, in the end, is never a happy one.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Relic.
j.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

'out of reality's cup' ...and aren't we the ones too careless that it spills all over?...
Nice metaphors, as always, Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Yumna...
j.

[Neville]

as far as poetry is concerned my friend, you are on one hell of a roll, as I read and hit these keys.. N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Neville...i appreciate your kind words,
j.

[Neville]

my pleasure as always,
N

[Stella Armour]

what goes up has to come down eventually and sometimes it gets broken or bruised in the process.

I love the metaphor of snow Jacob, and it does melt losing its beauty...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Stella.
j.

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

hi jacob ive missed this site and really love your poem especially this one that i just read.
My journey back to this site is slow having been doing some photography for the last month.
Hope you are well, a great poem Jacob as usual never dissapointed!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julie...
what were photographing?

[Julie McCarthy (juliespenhere)]

just putting all my nature pics up on a site trying to sell lol , i also went to a park and took hundreds of pics roses etc. hope you are well x

[Coyote Poetry]

A wonderful poem shared Jacob.
"coaster hearts bleed in the end
the red somnambulist slips on iced misgivings"
Complete poem was amazing. I did like the above lines. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Coyote.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.