edict (a cinquain)

edict  ( a cinquain)  

awkward

my lips are sealed

yours touch mine with yearning

implications of love decreed

i yield

erin-cilberto

11/24/18

Reviews

[Patricia Wedel]

I love ❤️ a Cinquain softly pressed where snowflakes melt against my breast… and Bluebirds sing in the Snow… with Chickadees in a Row… I know that Skies are Blue when Sunlight Sighs…. Gently, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

only one of these I ever penned, and most likely the only one...not a form guy....but thank you for commenting on my weak offering of this style.
j.

[Patricia Wedel]

I just feel mischievous after so much Pumpkin Pie… how is your friend doing in the Hospital? Almost looks like Snow… gently, Pat

[Desert Knave]

An excellent cinquain ... I especially like the play between the first and last line awkward / I yield. Much happening in just a few lines. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Jim.
j.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A tryst
to contemplate,
to enjoy and imbibe
as closeness becomes deep yearning
for love!

Nice one Jacob.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, John,
j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Not exactly an anomalous reaction.
A sin-quain prettily said.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Nothing like yielding to a sweet kiss and embracing the love...

Nice cinquain..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Fran Marie,
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Ah, a kiss can open the most complicated lock. Awkwardness seems to fly far away when yearning is around. Wonderful cinquain. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Lydi.
j.

[h d e rushin]

let me explain. being in love is being naïve. you look the other way. parse your lips for kissing even when you haven't brushed your teeth. you left you ego at the door. un-makeup faces can show age spots. people dye their hair. you miss people. you share. you give in to it all/ dana

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, yes, and yes
thank you, dana...

[lightsong]

the sheer power of Love, the primal incomparable power, beautifully, passionately, yearningly and strongly written in these few lines. amazing read.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Light,
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

ahahaha you yield indeed :)))))))))))) well done says i jacob ... seems we have a Cinquaine Train rollin' through the Cafe' .... i really like this one .. gives me some electrical current ... tho i would be the last to seal me lips...i would be the first to yield them ... still lusty in me old man brain ;)))))))))))
E.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

glad to see another oldie like me still has some of that lust left...thank you, E.
j.

[Einstein Noodle]

:) ................... me too!

[angel]

Best example I've seen, so far. Bravo, Jacob! Well done, man.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, angel.
j.