the inevitable chill

the inevitable chill 

 

 

November incentive

cold, damp resolve

the twitching of an empty branch

once covered with dense foliage

of memories

the summer love that couldn't withstand

frost silences

 

I want October back,

we had a chance then,

there still could have been beauty in us

 

but life is a quickly changing season

and regrets that already fell from the tree

cannot be reconnected,

no matter how many bonfires

we set to stave off the snows

to come.

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/11/18

Reviews

[Shazbatt969]

An inevitable chill entered my soul when I read this bleak tale, poetry of the finest,

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Shazbatt.
j.

[Bluebird]

Really like the wording as it gives great imagery

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Bluebird,
j.

[kentuck14]

J.
Love your poems . . . but I do feel a deep sadness underneath them. Do hope the light shines brighter in the days ahead, my poet friend.
Tom

[jacob erin-cilberto]

appreciate your kind words, Tom...actually i am a pretty content person, enjoying what i do...and my life...many past experiences and relationships lend a hand to my muse...
and i have always found that the pain is easier to write about than the smiles...
j.

[kentuck14]

It does seem that way. Good to hear it's just me then. All the best.
Tom

[Desert Knave]

Wow. This makes me want October back as well. You have done an excellent job weaving the seasons and love together in this one. Kudos. ~Jim

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jim,
j.

[Stella Armour]

chances missed, but never mind Jacob soon it will be spring again the season of new beginings :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Stella,
j.

[Matt B]

Really enjoyed this poem, the change over that short time made we feel I was there and wanting the choice, lovely!!!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Matt.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Yes if only we could go back but like changes we just have to adapt. Nice work Jacob as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[kitty]

"Regrets that already fell from the tree cannot readily be connected" . So true! Life is what it is no turning back! Forwad onwards!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insightful words, kitty,
j.

[kitty]

Always a pleasure J!

[Leslie Philibert]

A fine poem from one of my favourite poets here. It catches exactly the emotions of the content, with cleverly applied imagery, but it also has a strong `I `voice, that makes it personal and emotive. I tell all ;
read it if you want to know how to create excellent work.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your very kind review, Leslie...

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob... the rain and snow nurtures the earth... we can feel the new birth. The lazy hazy days of summer mirth have faded like roses with frost. Time to hybernate under a quilt of memories. truly, Pat

[jacob erin-cilberto]

your reply is beautifully poetic, Pat....better than the poem itself...thank you.

j.

[Patricia Wedel]

dear Jacob, Leonard Cohen would be proud of both me and thee. Have a blessed Thanksgiving. truly, Pat