Departed Signature

Departed Signature

 

 

 

there were extenuating circumstances,

but not for the foliage this year,

i think the leaves knew he left earlier than expected

that she suddenly found her color meshed with green lawns

of early exit

 

no one signed affidavits to the effect

that hearts would understand their brokenness 

or that maples don't care to be seen when they turn

they bare souls in a crass November breeze

and tombstones have no names

when the dead silence their tears

 

i loved you in all seasons

but the coldest ones 

still make my memory shiver

 

and only the smiles you left me

are wardrobe enough

to keep the rest of me warm

through it all. 

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

11/10/18

Reviews

[Alfred Kukitz]

Stellar imagination, filled with the elegance of golden words!

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

Hi Al, thanks for the visit...good to see you again, my friend.
j.

[andrew mitchell]

Sometimes words cannot describe words, a great write J.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

absolutely...thank you, andrew.

j.

[MOON]

Descriptive love the last verse, enrobed by memories.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Moon...

j.

[Jimmy Yetts]

Elegant, metaphorical and richly-imaged poetry, your signature.
The warm smiles of that last stanza also stay with readers.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Jimmy.

[Mark]

There's an old saying, that a person is never truly departed until there is no one left to speak their name. I might add , if that person has someone to write about them, then their memory is etched upon memory , and in turn etched upon memory...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Mark.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Heartfelt sorrow in every line of this one....remembering comes in waves as the calendar pages turn. Not sure if this is about a lost love or a lost family member, but in either case, I felt the heavy sighs as you remembered. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Lydi.
j.

[KeeD]

"i loved you in all seasons
but the coldest ones
still make my memory shiver"

These words shake me awake, they're written so well.

I can feel the loss and it hits me personally, I loved this poem. I live this poem.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Kee.
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

Honest and good words shared my friend.
"i loved you in all seasons
but the coldest ones
still make my memory shiver"
Cold days seem to bring back memories and thank you Jacob for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Coyote,
j.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome Jacob.

[Fran Marie]

Beautifully written verse. I especially liked "they bare souls in a crass November breeze"...and the ending lines.tie it. all together so nicely

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Fran Marie,
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Your third stanza really stands out. Exceptional lines. There were smiles through the coldness. After the event, we can reflect and try to make some sense from it.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your insights, Chris...
j.