Blizzard Beats

Blizzard Beats 

solid snow walls

frozen tundra of heart

expectations melded to ice dreams

heavy jacket exuberance

cannot cover the hurt

she is still snowing inside.

erin-cilberto

9/18/18

Reviews

[Julie McCarthy (juliesp..]

A very deep metaphor
Hope her snow melts one day for you

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Julie.
j.

[steppenwolf]

This is the kind of writing you do so well. It's bare and stark and reminds me of haiku.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Leslie.
j.

[Fabian G. Franklin]

Even the glaciers are melting. Nothing remains frozen forever. I enjoy your metaphor as always.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Fabian.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

The blizzard of lonesome dreams!

regards,
al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[angel]

I like your poem. Thought I'd answer with another.

Cold as ice
Soul and heart
Brain freeze concise
All thoughts depart.
Of all the luck;
Colossal f**k...

[jacob erin-cilberto]

cute....like your response...thanks, angel.
j.

[Shy Joe]

That's what we get when we all play the meteorologist. We head out in confidence shorts, only to be scratching goosebumps.

Christmas in July and you're still going to get bit by mosquitoes. The bleeding really never ever stops. I guess it's that bloodletting that causes us to be warm to the touch, and cold inside.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i like your metaphorical response, Joe.
thank you

[θεά]

Explicit use of metaphors within a compact poetic scheme. The heart can be a global map, showing different patterns of weather. The world can be a crucible waiting for its tests to be done, while the human heart acts as its testing apparatus. QED.

Smartly done as always.
The snow storm within the heart is necessitated. Sometimes.

Cheers!
M.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

love your insights Mallika...thanks for the kind review.
j.

[Neville]

That is just the way it is sometimes, makes me shiver just thinking about it..... everything about Blizzard Beats is spot on my friend.... N

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, Neville.
j.

[Neville]

you certainly deserve it and are most welcome..... N

[andrew mitchell]

Had to laugh, it’s all about the temperature after all! Clever J

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, andrew.
j.

[Lydia Shutter]

Once a person is hurt, they protect themselves with a stony exterior. Truth is, the pain still exists and every new relationship will be tinged with that pain. That snow takes a long time to melt. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

yes, it does...thank you, Lydi.
j.