ambush

ambush

 

 

 

the trees imposed silence

shedding inevitable

they proudly wore final cloaks

of many colors

they knew death would come

but most sought the dreams of spring

when they might reenter life

 

and green would be not of envy

but of a summer of understanding

and waiting

 

until the cycle

would repeat

 

and silence prevailed

over the din of leaves leaving.

 

 

 

erin-cilberto

8/23/18

Reviews

[Lydia Shutter]

Great personification of trees and other greenery. Yes, the cycle will repeat and even the trees know that is a good thing. Lydi**

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lydi.
j.

[Alfred Kukitz]

A wonderful rendition of nature’s song.

Regards,
Al

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Al.
j.

[Lyn Anderson]

Brilliant description of the season's changing

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Lyn.
j.

[Fran Marie]

Leaves leaving..yes the transition into Autumn is approaching..I so anticipate the cooler weather coming our way...lovely write..

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Fran Marie.
j.

[Chris Shaw]

Passing of the seasons. Never been a fan of autumn. Your words about the death of leaves reminds me why. Beautiful words, and your final two lines exceptional. Great work Jacob. Rich imagery here.

Chris

[jacob erin-cilberto]

interesting...tis my favorite season...the cool crisp air, dark blue sky and beautiful turn of the leaves...thank you for your kind words, Chris...
j.

[Chris Shaw]

I adore the spring. Rebirth and all that. Autumn reminds me of the feeling of going back to school after the summer holidays. The fun is over. That has stayed since I was about 14.

Chris

[Jimmy Yetts]

As we humans are part of nature, the inevitable cycle you describe should engender hope for our possible renewal.
An amazing poem!

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, Jimmy.
j.

[KWP]

The tree imposed silence, what a wonderfully vivid picture you paint there. I see the trees getting ready to hunker down for a while. Silence preserving the little energy required for yet another cold winter. I like the cyclic feel and it's hard not to embrace the natural turn of life in this one - X

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your words, KWP...
j.

[Gee]

The title always bring s to mind an unkempt lady garden on a sow....
Have just let the dog out for a pee and felt the onset of Autumn for the first time this year, my feet are bloody freezing. Love this time of the year when trees are lit like beacons as their leaves prepare to fall.
Morning Jacob, hope all is well and Trump gets his come uppance.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you, Gee.
j.

[John the Baptist]

At first glance this work seems to speak of impermanence, but when read again we see that seeming impermanence is just part of an eternal cycle that does not end. Silence may prevail as the leaves fall, but summer will eventually return. Somber yet hopeful simultaneously. Love the spare wording. Well done.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind review, John.
j.

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This made a great start of this morning for me...relatable with my country's freedom fight...also with some other daily things of my life...profound and spelled brilliantly! Thanks for sharing :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

thank you for your kind words, Tahsin.
j.

[¿]

You're heartedly welcome, Jacob :)